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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Travelling is indisputably one of the most favourite hobbies in these days and exploring the world deffinitelly became a dream of life for many people from all countries, regardless their age or gender. But should the price for visiting historical and cultural jewels of certain nation be different on the grounds of the nationality of the tourist?
We can already find some places which stand for this kind of approach. Every single person has a different opinion on this problem but is any of them correct and can it solve this arguable dispute? Whats true, in my belief, is that tourists are usually very rich people, who pay huge unmounts of money for luxurious accommodation, first-class airplane tickets and posh dishes and beverages and they would not see any difference in paying a few Czech Crowns more for some attraction.
On the other hand, if I had to pay more money for entrance to a castle in a foreign country I would definitely think twice before buying a ticket. It is not a fair treatment and it could also seem a little bit discriminatory. What is also important though, is that I would not want to pay more than locals because I am still a student and not a rich tourist and as a consequence of this step I might think of some other place as my final destination.
Another thing that deffinitely should not be overlooked is that some countries are quite poor in comparison to another ones and therefore giving even more money when travelling from the poorer one would be a nonsence. It would be probably already quite expensive for the travellers, even if the price would be the same for both, tourists and locals. Of course, if someone traveled the other way aroud, for example from the Great Britain to the Czech Republic, they could afford to pay more money for the attractions.
This question is, indeed, hard to answer because there are simply too mapy pros and cons. I think we should keep things the way they are now and save ourselves the trouble with trying to make some more money on tourists. In the end, it is not only about visiting every single museum or castle but meeting new cultures.

Teechr · Accepted Answer

Essays are structured texts. They have an introductory paragraph, some body paragraphs and a conclusion. Each one of these paragraphs does a certain job, so they need to be organized and follow certain conventions. You should also read up on the following terms:
General statement, thesis statement, topic sentence, and supporting sentences.

I would strongly advise you to find out how to plan and structure an essay before you start writing it.

Anonymous · Answer

Ok, thanks for your constructive critics.

But I could really use some help with checking the grammar - please, anybody willing to help?

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You should also learn about separating text into paragraphs and sentences. Doing so makes reading long text like yours, much easier. Once you have done that, you apply that to your text and post it here again.

Anonymous · Answer

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Travelling is indisputably one of the most favourite hobbies in these days and exploring the world deffinitelly became a dream of life for many people from all countries, regardless their age or gender. But should the price for visiting historical and cultural jewels of certain nation be different on the grounds of the nationality of the tourist?

We can already find some places which stand for this kind of approach. Every single person has a different opinion on this problem but is any of them correct and can it solve this arguable dispute? Whats true, in my belief, is that tourists are usually very rich people, who pay huge unmounts of money for luxurious accommodation, first-class airplane tickets and posh dishes and beverages and they would not see any difference in paying a few Czech Crowns more for some attraction.

On the other hand, if I had to pay more money for entrance to a castle in a foreign country I would definitely think twice before buying a ticket. It is not a fair treatment and it could also seem a little bit discriminatory. What is also important though, is that I would not want to pay more than locals because I am still a student and not a rich tourist and as a consequence of this step I might think of some other place as my final destination.

Another thing that deffinitely should not be overlooked is that some countries are quite poor in comparison to another ones and therefore giving even more money when travelling from the poorer one would be a nonsence. It would be probably already quite expensive for the travellers, even if the price would be the same for both, tourists and locals. Of course, if someone traveled the other way aroud, for example from the Great Britain to the Czech Republic, they could afford to pay more money for the attractions.

This question is, indeed, hard to answer because there are simply too mapy pros and cons. I think we should keep things the way they are now and save ourselves the trouble with trying to make some more money on tourists. In the end, it is not only about visiting every single museum or castle but meeting new cultures.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Travelling is indisputably one of the most favourite hobbies ~~in these days~~ and exploring the world deffinitelly ~~became~~ has become a dream of life for many people from all countries, regardless of their age or gender. But should the price for visiting historical (missing word) and cultural jewels of a certain nation be different on the grounds of the nationality of the tourist?

We can already find some places which stand for this kind of approach. Every single person has a different opinion (there are only two possibilities. How can everyone have a different opinion?) on this problem (Is this an actual problem?) but is any of them correct and can it solve this arguable dispute? Whats true, I believe ~~in my belief~~, is that tourists are usually very rich people, who pay huge unmounts of money for luxurious accommodation, first-class airplane tickets and posh dishes and beverages and they would not see any difference in paying a few Czech Crowns more for some attraction.

On the other hand, if I had to pay more money for entrance to a castle in a foreign country I would definitely think twice before buying a ticket. It is not a fair treatment and it could also seem a little bit discriminatory. What is also important though, is that I would not want to pay more than locals because I am still a student and not a rich tourist and as a consequence ~~of this step~~ (comma) I might think of some other place as my final destination.

Another thing that deffinitely should not be overlooked is that some countries are quite poor in comparison to another ones and therefore giving even more money when travelling from the poorer one would be a nonsence. It would be probably already quite expensive for the travellers, even if the price would be the same for both, tourists and locals. Of course, if someone traveled the other way aroud, for example from the Great Britain to the Czech Republic, they could afford to pay more money for the attractions.

This question is, indeed, hard to answer because there are simply too mapy pros and cons. I think we should keep things the way they are now and save ourselves the trouble with trying to make some more money on tourists. In the end, it is not only about visiting every single museum or castle but meeting new cultures.

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