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Anonymous Posted 13 years ago
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Could you please check my descriptive writing?

I am learning about the greek mythology and my teacher asked me to write a descriptive writing about my own perfect landscape. I just started, so i know i have to add and fix a lot of things, but i dont know how.

ok heres my writing

I woke up this morning from the warm, bright sunlight coming through the window. Soon as I got up, I decided to get out and have some fresh air. When I got out of the house, I was standing on the top of the green, flat, hill, on this warm, sunny day. I was able to see the blue, clear sky, and feel the gentle, cool wind blowing toward me. My feet were touching those fresh, silky, and smooth green grass, which made me calm and peaceful. From the hill, I was able to see the sandy beach right in front of me. As I got closer to the beach and step on the hot, rough, sand, I was able to smell the salty, sea breeze, see the small, round, islands, and hear the little waves splashing to the sand, which tempted me to swim in the water. To continue the walk, I decided to go to the huge, tall, grey mountain, which was located next to the hills. When I got closer to the mountain, I was able to smell the tall, green trees and the colourful, little flowers, which made my whole entire body fresh and clean. When I followed the trails, I was able to see the many various and different animals and plants, and the little ponds which contained the fresh, clean water. I looked at the clear, pure water; I was able to see some little animals and the insects swimming in the water, and the tiny little pebbles. When I closed my eyes and listened to the variety of sounds, I was able to hear the voices of birds and the animals and the water from the waterfall splashing into the hard ground.
  
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