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Task 1: The bar chart shows the percentage of small , medium, large companies which used social media for business purposes between 2012 to 2016.Given is a column graph comparing the percentage of three different types of companies having a presence on social media over a four years period between 2012 and 2016.     Looking first as the whole, the percentage of businesses using social media went up over the whole period regardless of their size. Also, although the figure of large companies increased the least, it was still by far the greatest social media presence each year.     With respect to minor and medium businesses, in the first three years, the figure rose gradually to about 35% and 49% respectively. After that, both small and medium companies experienced a mild setback in 2015 to 30%. In the last year of the period, the percentage of these two types of businesses recovered to around 50%.In contrast, the percentage of large companies was more than double small and medium businesses in the first year of the period at 78%. After that, this figure remained stable until 2015, after surging to 52%, preceding a recovery to less than 80% at the end of the period.Thanks a lot!

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Task 1: The bar chart shows the percentage of small , medium, large companies which used social media for business purposes between 2012 to 2016.

Given is a column graph comparing the percentage of three different types of companies having a presence on social media over a four years period between 2012 and 2016.

Looking first as the whole, the percentage of businesses using social media went up over the whole period regardless of their size. Also, although the figure of large companies increased the least, it was still by far the greatest social media presence each year.

With respect to minor and medium businesses, in the first three years, the figure rose gradually to about 35% and 49% respectively. After that, both small and medium companies experienced a mild setback in 2015 to 30%. In the last year of the period, the percentage of these two types of businesses recovered to around 50%.

In contrast, the percentage of large companies was more than double small and medium businesses in the first year of the period at 78%. After that, this figure remained stable until 2015, after surging to 52%, preceding a recovery to less than 80% at the end of the period.

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AlpheccaStars · Answer

Given (That is not good.) is a column graph (I have never seen this described as a column graph. Use standard names for these kinds of common plots. Read my advice. ) comparing the percentage of three different types (what types of companies are they? - Retail stores? Used car lots? Electronics? manufacturing? Tourism? Do not leave the reader guessing.) of companies having a presence on social media ~~over a four years~~ (wrong form) ~~period~~ between 2012 and 2016.

~~Looking first as the whole,~~ the percentage of businesses using social media went up ~~over the whole period~~ regardless of their size. Also, although the figure (wrong word. Read my advice.) of large companies increased the least, it ~~was~~ still had by far the greatest social media presence each year.

With respect to minor (wrong word.) and medium businesses, (That is one category.) in the first three years, the figure (wrong word. ) rose gradually to about 35% and 49% (Unclear. You are referring to one category, so why are there two numbers?) respectively. After that, both small (The reader is confused about the categories. Do not keep changing the category names.) and medium companies experienced (wrong word. Read my advice) a mild setback (wrong phrase. A company or business setback means that they earned less income or had fewer sales. The business declined.) .in 2015 to 30%. In the last year of the period, the percentage of these two types of businesses recovered to around 50%.

In contrast, the percentage of large companies was more than double that of the small and medium businesses in the first year ~~of the period~~ at 78%. After that, this figure (wrong word.) remained stable (poor word choice. Not appropriate.) until 2015, after surging (wrong word. Read my advice. ) to 52%, preceding a recovery to less (wrong usage. A recovery for a business means their sales or income or profits became as much as an earlier time.) than 80% (unclear expression. 45% is less than 80% and so is 76%. Use an adverb.) in 2016.. ~~at the end of the period.~~ (verbose. Just use the year.)

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