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Topic: Write an essay about the causes of unemployment among young people.

Nowadays, a lot of young people find it hard to get a job. Unemployment is one of the most serious social issues that many countries are facing in the world. It is caused by some reasons.

The first cause is the lack of working experience. In fact, many young people often have tunnel vision and solely focus on the major or subject which they learn at colleges or schools because they think it is not necessary to learn and find out other things such as teamwork, time management, and especially communicative skills. As a result, they have much knowledge in their field but do not know how to cooperate with others, dealing with difficult situations, and getting in stuck when having a conversation.

Another cause is the lower education. For example, many jobs are required a bachelor’s degree or higher to work effectively. However, plenty of young people often look for a job after they graduate from high school without applying for universities or colleges because of poor families. Consequently, they often get a low salary, working under uncomfortable conditions, and facing health issues both physical and metal.

The final cause is not following their passions. Young people usually don’t think carefully about what they are really interested in or good at doing and maybe they can easily get a degree in the end. But after spending a short time in the job market, they will realize that these jobs do not match their personalities and talents. They may get disappointed with themselves and make it impossible to get a job when they don’t like it.

In conclusion, not having enough knowledge, working skills, and choosing the wrong majors are the most popular issues that young people are experiencing when finding a career. In my opinion, governments should try to find a way to solve this problem as soon as possible.