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In my opinion, students need to study at a university after graduating from high school instead of getting a gap-year. Firstly, they will have opportunities to get specialized knowledge sooner in order to have the necessary tools to succeed in their future occupations. There will be challenges for students who might start their study progresses late because changes in the jobs they chose can occur so quickly day by day. Secondly, professional universities are able to give them chances to improve their soft skills. To raise the education quality and attract more and more students taking courses, a lot of universities in the world are designing their official curriculums that can help students improve many essential skills such as communication, controlling emotions and attitudes, teamwork and so on. Therefore, we can not deny the benefits that studying at universities can give to students, and gap-year might not be always a good choice for students.