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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
Letter Writing
Could you help me to correct this email?
Hi everybody! I really need your help: I'm going to send an email to a Canadian agency for working in a summer camp this year. I really would like to know if it completely correct, as I don't want to make a bad impression 
Could you help me?
Thank you so much!
My name is M.N., I’m an Italian 18 y.o. girl, who lives in Milan, in northern Italy. I would like to come to Canada and work there in a summer camp because I think that this would be a wonderful experience. I’ve already had experiences with children of different ages (from 5 up to 12 years old, more or less), so I think that working in the social would be perfect for me.
I’m a very active girl, I like staying outside and do different activities. I usually tend to make everybody playing and doing all the activities, I like seeing everybody having fun and enjoying his time.
I’m really into reading and watching movies, and above all I really like travelling and exploring new places. I think that seeing what’s around us makes us more conscious of ourselves and of the world in which we live, so I usually tend to make children explore nature and I prefer them not to spend too much time watching TV or playing videogames.
I would like to work in a summer camp and generally to help children because I think that this experience will help me to grow up and to be more responsible. I’ve never been to Canada, so that would be a great chance to meet new people and living in a country completely different from mine, and learning new customs and lifestyles. I personally will try to make children know more about Italian culture and customs, and I will do my best to make them not only having fun, but learning something from the summer camp experience.
My level of English is usually quite good, but I think that working with children will make me improve my skills, especially because children’s speaking is more difficult to understand. I want to be helpful and receive the more I can from this experience, as I’m sure it will be wonderful.
I’m looking forward your reply,
Best wishes,
Maria
Could you help me?
Thank you so much!
My name is M.N., I’m an Italian 18 y.o. girl, who lives in Milan, in northern Italy. I would like to come to Canada and work there in a summer camp because I think that this would be a wonderful experience. I’ve already had experiences with children of different ages (from 5 up to 12 years old, more or less), so I think that working in the social would be perfect for me.
I’m a very active girl, I like staying outside and do different activities. I usually tend to make everybody playing and doing all the activities, I like seeing everybody having fun and enjoying his time.
I’m really into reading and watching movies, and above all I really like travelling and exploring new places. I think that seeing what’s around us makes us more conscious of ourselves and of the world in which we live, so I usually tend to make children explore nature and I prefer them not to spend too much time watching TV or playing videogames.
I would like to work in a summer camp and generally to help children because I think that this experience will help me to grow up and to be more responsible. I’ve never been to Canada, so that would be a great chance to meet new people and living in a country completely different from mine, and learning new customs and lifestyles. I personally will try to make children know more about Italian culture and customs, and I will do my best to make them not only having fun, but learning something from the summer camp experience.
My level of English is usually quite good, but I think that working with children will make me improve my skills, especially because children’s speaking is more difficult to understand. I want to be helpful and receive the more I can from this experience, as I’m sure it will be wonderful.
I’m looking forward your reply,
Best wishes,
Maria
Top answer
Hi Maria; It' a charming letter. There isn't anything not to like about it! There are some comma spices and other small mistakes.
- Hi Maria; It' a charming letter.
- There isn't anything not to like about it!
- There are some comma spices and other small mistakes.
- N.
- o (spell out - year-old) .
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Hi Maria;
It' a charming letter. There isn't anything not to like about it! There are some comma spices and other small mistakes.
My name is M.N., (period or semi-colon) I’m an Italian 18 y.o (spell out - year-old). girl, who lives in Milan, in northern Italy. I would like to come to Canada and work there in a summer camp be
It' a charming letter. There isn't anything not to like about it! There are some comma spices and other small mistakes.
My name is M.N., (period or semi-colon) I’m an Italian 18 y.o (spell out - year-old). girl, who lives in Milan, in northern Italy. I would like to come to Canada and work there in a summer camp be
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