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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.AnswerThe bar char compares the amount of time people in the UK spent on three types of hone call between 1995 and 2002.Overall, the telephone calls that used local and fixed line were the most popular types among overall usage. The lowest category was mobiles call, but this category had the significant rise throughout the period.In 1995, people lived in the UK spent 70 billion minutes on local calls, and about half the amount of time was 36 billion minutes for national and international calls, on contrast, mobile phones were only be used for 4 billion minutes. Over the following four years, all type of telephone calls increased generally.In 1999, the amount of time the UK people make via local calls reached the peak at 90 billion minutes. The figure in this category declined, but the figure in the other two types of phone call continued. In the end of the period, national and international call reached 55 billion minutes on the mobiles call in the UK reached 46 billion minutes, while the local calls time decreased and reached 70 billion minutes.

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The bar chart compares the amount of time people in the UK spent on three types of phone calls between 1995 and 2002.

Overall, the telephone calls that used ~~local and~~ fixed lines for local and national/international calls were the most popular types among overall usage. The lowest category was mobiles calls, but this category had ~~the~~ a significant rise throughout the period. [The categories are not "local" and "fixed lines," they are "local" and "national/international," which are also fixed lines.]

In 1995, people who lived in the UK spent 70 billion minutes on local calls, and about half ~~the~~ that amount of time, was 36 billion minutes, for national and international calls. ~~,on~~ In contrast, mobile phones were only be used for 4 billion minutes. Over the following four years, all types of telephone calls increased ~~generally~~.

In 1999, the amount of time ~~the~~ UK people used making ~~make via~~ local calls reached ~~the~~ a/its peak at 90 billion minutes. After that ~~The figure in~~ this category declined, but the figures for in the other two types of phone calls continued to rise.

In At the end of the period, national/international calls reached 55 billion minutes, ~~on the~~ mobiles calls in the UK reached 46 billion minutes, while the local calls had declined to ~~time decreased and reached~~ 70 billion minutes.

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The bar chart compares the amount of time people in the UK spent on three types of phone calls between 1995 and 2002.

Overall, the telephone calls that used fixed lines for local and national/ international calls were the most popular types among overall usage. The lowest category was mobile calls, but this category had a significant rise throughout the period.

In 1995, people who lived in the UK spent 70 billion minutes on local calls, and about half that amount of time, 36 billion minutes, for national and international calls. In contrast, mobile phones were only used for 4 billion minutes. Over the following four years, all types of telephone calls increased.

In 1999, the amount of time UK people used making local calls reached its peak at 90 billion minutes. After that this category declined, but the figures for the other two types of phone calls continued to rise.

At the end of the period, national/international calls reached 55 billion minutes, mobile calls in the UK reached 46 billion minutes, while the local calls had declined to 70 billion minutes.

One more note: Pay attention to plurals. You usually need to add the "s." Any questions?

Could you help me correct my writing task 1. Thank you.

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