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Lucas21c Posted 14 years ago
Grammar
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Could you tell me whether the following sentence sounds fine and natural?
Thank you.
His new idea alternative of established policies gets attacked in the respect that it can also degenerate into exploitation for rich people in the same way just exactly as he has criticized.
(= He suggested a new idea, but it is critized because it can also bring about exploitation for the sake of rich people by the way which he has attacked the established ideas.)
Thank you.
His new idea alternative of established policies gets attacked in the respect that it can also degenerate into exploitation for rich people in the same way just exactly as he has criticized.
(= He suggested a new idea, but it is critized because it can also bring about exploitation for the sake of rich people by the way which he has attacked the established ideas.)
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You are trying to squeeze too many words and complicated structures into simple ideas. When you revise and polish, you must consider serious revision for simplicity, clarity and directness. His alternative has been attacked because it could degenerate into exploitation of the rich , just as he has criticized established policies for doing.
- You are trying to squeeze too many words and complicated structures into simple ideas.
- When you revise and polish, you must consider serious revision for simplicity, clarity and directness.
- His alternative has been attacked because it could degenerate into exploitation of the rich , just as he has criticized established policies for doing.
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You are trying to squeeze too many words and complicated structures into simple ideas. When you revise and polish, you must consider serious revision for simplicity, clarity and directness.
His alternative has been attacked because it could degenerate into exploitation of the rich, just as he has criticized established policies for doing.
His alternative has been attacked because it could degenerate into exploitation of the rich, just as he has criticized established policies for doing.
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