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0 Hmm, I was wondering if you could take a look at the following text and make some corrections and then explain why you've corrected something this way, not the other.02br00  (These are not mine texts, however I wanna check how many errors I've spotted)02br02br00  Hi Tom,02br00  Three days ago I arrived to London. I stay in the Grand Hotel, it isn’t  so expensive hotel but very comfortable. Food is very tasty, especially  dinners.02br00  Tomorrow I want to visit the Buckingham Palace.02br00  I hope that you have also good time.02br00  See you soon02br00  XYZ02br02br00  and02br02br00  Dear Sir/Madame,02br02br00  I am writing to you because I have reserved by the Internet and next I  have paid for Course: ‘English in Two Weeks. Level Pre-intermediate” in  your school in Exeter. I have not got any answer from you until now, so  that I am worried.02br02br00  I have called to you three times but nobody answered and I have left  messages on your answerphone. I am really bad surprise about this  situation because now I cannot plan my journey. I ask you to confirm my  participation on your course or refund my money.02br02br00  I hope that this situation will be quickly solve, because I have heard only good opinions about your school.02br00  Thank you for your assistance.02br00  I am looking forward to hearing from you.02br00  Yours faithfully.02br00  XYZ02br02br00  best wishes, thanks ! 0-

Paco2004 · Accepted Answer

0 Hi 02br
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00I'll do the first part.01blockquote

01cite10Anonymous12cite10Hi Tom,12br
10Three days ago I arrived to London. I stay in the Grand Hotel, it isn’t so expensive hotel but very comfortable. Food is very tasty, especially dinners.12br
10Tomorrow I want to visit the Buckingham Palace.12br
10I hope that you have also good time.12br
10See you soon12br
10XYZ12blockquote

11font00Three days ago I arrived 01b00in 02b00London. I01b00'm staying02b00 in the Grand Hotel. It's very confortable, but not so expensive.. Food is very tasty, especially dinner01del~~00s02del~~00.02br
00Tomorrow I want to visit 01del~~00the02del~~00 Buckingham Palace.02br
00I hope that you also have 01b00a02b00 good time.02br
00See you soon02br
02font02br
00paco 0-

Anonymous · Answer

0 Paco, thanks for you post. I had doubts about "the" before "Buckingham...", I thought that maybe the one who has written the letter was thinking that "Buckingham Palace" is unique and therefore "the" is needed...0-

Clive · Answer

0Hi,02br
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00I've suggested a number of changes, mainly related to vocabulary but some other things as well. I haven't explained the reason for every change, so if you don't understand anything, please write again.02br
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01font00Dear Sir/Madame,02br
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00I am writing to you because I have reserved by the Internet and next I have paid for Course: ‘English in Two Weeks. Level Pre-intermediate” in your school in Exeter. I have not got any answer from you until now, so that I am worried.00 01i00I would re-organize this paragraph as follows, to first state what you have done and then indicate what the problem with it is. 'Reserve' is not a good choice of words, I suggest 'enroll'. 02i02font02br
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01font00I have enrolled, via the Internet, and have also paid for your course, ‘English in Two Weeks. Level Pre-intermediate', in your school in Exeter. I am writing because I have not yet received any response from you, and I am worried. 02br
02br
00I have called you three times but nobody has answered, and I have left messages on your answerphone. I am really concerned about this situation because now I cannot plan my trip. I ask you to confirm my participation in your course or to refund my money.02br
02br
00I hope that this situation will be quickly resolved, because I have heard only good opinions about your school.02br
00Thank you for your assistance. I am looking forward to hearing from you.02br
00Yours faithfully.02br
00XYZ02br
02font02br
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00I'd also like to add one small comment to Paco's corrections. I'd say 01i00'The food02i00 is very tasty', as it's a specific reference to the food in the hotel.02br
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00Best wishes, Clive01font02font0-

MrPedantic · Answer

0One small footnote:02br
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001. I hope that you have a good time. 02br
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00— the "good time" refers to some future event. Perhaps the correspondent will be going on holiday soon.02br
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002. I hope that you're having a good time.02br
02br
00— the "good time" refers to some current event. Perhaps the correspondent is also on holiday.02br
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00MrP0-

Believer · Answer

0This is my version:02br
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00Hi, Tom,02br
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00I arrived in London three days ago. After arriving here, I stayed in the Grand Hotel and found it to be inexpensive and comfortable. Food was tasty, especially the dinners. Tomorrow, I want to visit the Buckingham Palace. I hope you are having a good time too.02br
02br
00See you soon,02br
02br
00XYZ02br
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00Dear Sir/Madam:02br
02br
00I am writing to you because I completed the application for your course, English in Two Weeks, the Pre-intermediate level, in Exester, by the internet and then, I did make a payment for the course. I am worried because I have not received any replies since.02br
02br
00I called you three times but have not received an answer yet. I did leave messages on your answering machine. I am sad about the situation because I have to plan my journey and I cannot do so. I am asking you to confirm my reservation for the course or refund the money.02br
02br
00I want to let you know that I heard only good things about your school and hope this incident will not make me think otherwise about your school. 02br
02br
00Thank your for your anticipated cooperation on this matter and looking forward to hear from you soon.02br
02br
00Faithfully yours,02br
02br
00XYZ 02br
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01b00I would welcome any comments on mine too. Is my version too passionate and personal? 02b0-

MrPedantic · Answer

0Hello Believer02br
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00I've put one or two corrections in sq. brackets:02br
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01i00_______________02i02br
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00Hi, Tom,02br
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00I arrived in London three days ago. After arriving here, I stayed in the Grand Hotel and found it to be inexpensive and comfortable. 01del~~00Food02del~~00 [The food] was tasty, especially the dinners. Tomorrow, I want to visit the Buckingham Palace. I hope you are having a good time too.02br
02br
00See you soon,02br
02br
00XYZ02br
02br
01i00_________________02i02br
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00Dear Sir/Madam:02br
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00I am writing to you because I completed the application [form] for your course, English in Two Weeks, the Pre-intermediate level, in Exester [Exeter?], by 01del~~00the02del~~00 internet 01del~~00and then, I did make a payment for the course02del~~00 [and made a payment for the course at the same time]. I am worried because I have not [yet] received [a reply] 01del~~00any replies since02del~~00.02br
02br
00I called you three times but have not received an answer yet. I 01del~~00did leave02del~~00 [also left] messages on your answering machine. I am 01del~~00sad02del~~00 [very worried] about the situation because I have to plan my journey and I cannot do so. I am asking you to confirm my reservation for the course or refund the money.02br
02br
00I want to let you know that [up till now] I [have] heard only good things about your school. 01del~~00 and hope this incident will not make me think otherwise about your school02del~~00. 02br
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00Thank your for your anticipated cooperation 01del~~00on02del~~00 [in] this matter and 01del~~00looking02del~~00 forward to hear from you soon.02br
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00Faithfully yours,02br
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00XYZ 02br
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00MrP0-

Pieanne · Answer

0I have two questions 05000 :02br
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00- Do we have to put the article before "pre-intermediate level"?02br
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00- Shouldn't it be "look forward to hearing from you"?010id1

Paco2004 · Answer

0 01blockquote

01cite10MrPedantic12cite10I've put one or two corrections in sq. brackets: 12br
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10Hi, Tom,12br
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10I arrived in London three days ago. After arriving here, I stayed in the Grand Hotel and found it to be inexpensive and comfortable. 11del~~10Food12del~~10 [The food] was tasty, especially the dinners. Tomorrow, I want to visit the Buckingham Palace. I hope you are having a good time too.12br
12br
10See you soon,12br
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10XYZ10Hello MrP12br
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10Could you cofirm for me whether we should modify "Buckingham Palace" with THE? I checked "went to Buckingham Palace" and "went to the Buckingham Palace" in google. The former hit 13200 sites whereas the latter did only 52 sites, and I found an article like below in the Wikipedia.12br
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10Buckingham Palace is the official London residence of the British monarch (or sovereign), and the largest "working" royal palace remaining in the world. 11u10The expression "Buckingham Palace" or simply "The Palace" has become a common way of referring to the source of press statements coming from parts of the British Royal Family12u10.12br
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10paco 12blockquote

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Clive · Answer

0Hi,02br
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00Buckingham Palace is considered a proper name, and not preceded by 'the'.02br
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00Best wishes, Clive0-

MrPedantic · Answer

0 01blockquote

01cite10Pieanne12cite10I have two questions 15010 :12br
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10- Do we have to put the article before "pre-intermediate level"?12br
12br
10- Shouldn't it be "look forward to hearing from you"?12br
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12blockquote

10Yes, "pre-intermediate level" is better without the article, if it's the name of the course; and "look forward to hearing from you" is correct!02br
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00Deduct 10 points from my score and add them to yours...02br
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00MrP010id1

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