Could you go over my self-introduction?

Hi, I wrote this writing for myself but I am not sure whether it is grammatically correct and sounds natural.

If it is too long, it is okay that you just check one paragraph among five ones.

Thank you.

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Hi, my name is XXX. There may be nothing careful like talking about myself to others because I don’t know about myself enough actually and about others too. If I talk about me too much, it may look arrogant or stupid. But talking too little, it can make me secret or blunt. I do not hope to make you misunderstand me in any way before you really know me. So, I just talk about my simple experience enough to share with all of you, instead of talking about me through my own voice.





4 years ago from now, I was in Beijing that is the very central place of China in terms of Economy and Politics. People always said China would be bigger and more powerful in the near future. So, I eagerly wanted to look at the growing Giant with my own eyes before I would be thirties. I saw everything surprisingly changing every day there. So, I definitely agreed that this country was very dynamic and would become richer and richer. However, another question also came across into my mind. This country absolutely would be more wealthy, but for whom?





Everything looks different depending on where you look at it. The same thing came to me. When I was outside China, the nation just seemed so developing and progressing without any hesitation. But, inside China, it appeared sick like a patient and had its own untreatable problems. Few people enjoy prosperity of economic development, but most of the others were suffered by the very development. Inflation caused by exportation stifled the populace and made them relatively poorer. It doesn’t mean that the Chinese people need not develop their own country. It means the time comes that they have to think about why they need make their own country rich. And I think that question is also still needed and meaningful to us, Koreans.





The sudden changes caused by the so-called globalization, especially on economy, affect our right and lives everywhere every second. If there are some employees who are paid less than you, your employer also will ask you to satisfy yourself with a lower salary. How we can protect our job and right under this situation? We just hate Chinese people because they get lower salary than us? No, it can’t be an answer. We know this is not such a simple story.





In this country is there no dictator anymore who threatened us with a gun. But we are facing another enemy of freedom because we live now in the world where we can be easily affected by any factor taking place on the world. Even any dictator who governs a state like Egypt or Syria can make Korean economy disturbed by raising an oil price. All people and nations are connected taking both the good and the bad. That’s our new ‘Shock and Awe’ which we cannot avoid.