Could you give me some comments on this writing as a writing of IELTS task 1
Two charts demonstrate how energy is taken in an average Australian household in first chartand the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy used in second chart. According to first paragraph, Australian household used the most popular is heating at 42%. Following heating by water heating which service people 30% in pie chart. While in contract, refrigeration, cooling lighting which appropriate noticeblely low are 7%, 2%, 4% respectively. And the ranking third place is other appliances at 15%.
In the other hand, the heating used by the green house gas emissions is just only 15% water heating stand at second place at 32%. The other appliances propriate quite large at 28%.
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nh Th? M? ng, You have written about 110 words.
- nh Th?
- M?
- ng, You have written about 110 words.
- The minimum requirement is 150.
- You will not get a good score.
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Tr?nh Th? M? Phu?ng,
You have written about 110 words. The minimum requirement is 150. You will not get a good score.
You do not use paragraphs effectively. Task 1 should have 3 or 4 paragraphs. Describe the image in the first paragraph. Do not write about the data. In the second paragraph, write two or three most important observations. Write about interesting detail in the re
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