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The bar graph gives information on the proportion of part-time workers in four nations across the United Kingdom: England, Northen Ireland, Scotland and Wales between 1980 and 2010.

In general, the majority of countries demonstrate an increase in the percentage of part-time workers with the exception of Northern Ireland.

According to the graph, in 1980, the percentage of people working part-time in Wales was over twice as many as that in Northern Ireland, with 32% and 15% respectively . By 2010, however, the difference between the two countries was even more striking as figures of Wales being three times higher than those of Northern Ireland, with 35% and 12% respectively.

By contrast, the percentage of part-time employees in England rose slightly from roughly 25% to over 31% by the end of the period. By comparison, figures of Scotland show an even more remarkable rise. From just under 11% in 1980, numbers doubled to about 20% in 2010, overtaking those of Northern Ireland.