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Masanori Takaoka Posted 10 years ago
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Could you correct the writing?
My favorite place
My favorite place is on the bridge near my apartment. The bridge is among skyscrapers and above the sea. Mostly, I find only one or two ships floating this vast sea. Seeing this scenery, I become so calm that I walk more slowly than usual with unconsciousness. Sometimes, I feel as if I could flee from the dairy bustle.
My favorite place is on the bridge near my apartment. The bridge is among skyscrapers and above the sea. Mostly, I find only one or two ships floating this vast sea. Seeing this scenery, I become so calm that I walk more slowly than usual with unconsciousness. Sometimes, I feel as if I could flee from the dairy bustle.
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Masanori Takaoka The bridge is among skyscrapers and above the sea. That's unnatural, and it suggests that the skyscrapers are in the sea! " Was this written by a (Japanese) student of yours?
- Masanori Takaoka The bridge is among skyscrapers and above the sea.
- That's unnatural, and it suggests that the skyscrapers are in the sea!
- " Was this written by a (Japanese) student of yours?
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Masanori TakaokaThe bridge is among skyscrapers and above the sea.That's unnatural, and it suggests that the skyscrapers are in the sea!
Masanori TakaokadairyI presume that was meant to be "daily."
Was this written by a (Japanese) student of yours?
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Thank you for the reply.
teechrWas this written by a (Japanese) student of yours?Yes, this is what a Japanese student of mine wrote.
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I suggest you point out the above points (as well as others which I'm sure you can find) to your student and ask them to rewrite the paragraph. I also suggest that your student starts by writing simple (not in any way shape or form complex) individual sentences, which he/she can connect afterwards to make a paragraph.
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