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Mother is the most important person in my life. She is very beautiful,clever, and smart. I love her kindhearted and she is my ideal person in my life . I want to follow her behaviors in my life.

CalifJim · Accepted Answer

Ali Fakih My mother is the most important person in my life. She is very beautiful, clever, and smart. I love her kindheartedness. ~~and~~ She is my ideal person in my life. I want to follow her behaviors in my life.

I've corrected a few things above. The last two sentences are not very natural.

'clever' and 'smart' are too similar in meaning to use both.

Here's my version for comparison:

My mother is the most important person in my life. She is beautiful, clever, and kindhearted.  She is my ideal of what a mother should be.  I want to be just like her and do everything as she does.

Of course, there are about 100 other ways of writing it.

CJ

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