Could you correct my Ielts writing task 2, please? Thank you very much

Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree about his opinion?

The protection of natural species has become a hot topic for many individuals who believed that humans are paying too much attention and allocating too many resources to this issue. In my point of view, I totally agree with this opinion.

On the one hand, I think there are two main reasons why people spend a huge amount of careness protecting wildlife. Firstly, many non-governmental organizations have been established in order to protect animals all over the world. However, they are really worried about the activities which are related to animals in several different fields in global. For instance, the music video named “ROAR” that is performed by Katy Perry was accused as using tiger and elephant image so as to the purchase and sale purposes while she did not mean to. Moreover, these articles write about wild animals are able to be shared in a wink on the Internet. If a bear is caught somewhere, tons of news about this creature will immediately spread in a wide way on social media like Facebook.

On the other hand, the budget for this project is being overwhelmed to save the wild birds. Firstly, any wild bird’s protection projects need to require a large amount of money to be carried out. Besides, infrastructure and research’s for conserving the DNA of wild birds, the handier for expenditure. Secondly, the expense for these protection projects is in a relatively unnecessary limit. Meanwhile, the source of capital can be built to enhance living standards in some regions contrasts with the investment in protecting many breeds of birds seemed to waste of money.

In conclusion, while I do not refuse the argument for the conservation of wildlife, I believe that it should attract less attention and fewer resources from the public.