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Fredericoskw Posted 15 years ago
Letter Writing

Could you correct my cv, please?

Hello, could you please check my cover letter. I would be very grateful. Thanks

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Profile
I have shown myself to be self-motivated, committed and determined in achieving my goals. I have also demonstrated negotiating and organizing skills, a sense of responsibility and my capacity to work hard under pressure. I am able to relate to a wide range of people, as proven by my varied work experiences.

Education
2008-2012 Escola Politécnica - USP
Graduating in Industrial Engineering - graduation expected in december/2012.

2005-2007 Colégio Santa Cruz
High School.

Professional Experience
2011 Banco BBM
Summer Job in the Macroeconomic Research Department of Banco BBM during the period of January/2011 to February/2011.
• Constructed a panel of data on 25 countries, covering the main macroeconomic aggregates and financial indicators.
• Developed an econometric model to determine the equilibrium interest rate.

2010-2011 Undergraduate research project: Life Cycle Assessment of Sustainable Products (in development).
PIBITI/CNPq/USP grant holder. Project directed by Dr. Marly Monteiro, of the Production Engineering Department of Escola Politécnica - USP.

2009-2010 Big Bear Mountain
Participated in the Work&Travel USA program during the period of December/2009 to March/2010. Worked as Rental Attendant in Bear Mountain ski resort, Califórnia - EUA.

2008-2009 Poli Júnior
Worked with consultancy projects and events as manager at Poli Júnior, junior enterprise of Escola Politécnica - USP.
• Founded the newspaper Projeção:
o Guided a seven-person team.
o Conducted meetings and negotiations.
• Member of the organizing team of the recruiting fair Workshop Integrativo Poli Jr.
• Assisted in two projects for external clients.
• Member of the Financial Team.

Other Courses and Awards
2010-2012 Scholarship for academic excellence by GE Foundation "Scholar-Leaders Program 2010".
Leadership development program to complement the student's academic curriculum.

2010 Professional Development Program (12 hours) - Outward Bound Brasil - São Paulo, July/2010.

2010 Award for best project - Information Systems I (PRO2511) course - São Paulo, June/2010.

2009 Desafio Sebrae 2009 (passed to the state semi-final) - Sebrae - São Paulo, May/2009.

Languages
Portuguese: Mother Tongue.

English: Fluent (currently studying).
• TOEFL iBT: 107/120 - Educational Testing Service.

French: Intermediate (currently studying).
• DELF/ A3 - French Ministry of Education.

Activities and Interests
Volunteer at Um Teto para Meu País (NGO).

XXX National Meeting of Production Engineering (ENEGEP) - São Carlos, October/2010.

Participation in long-distance swimming and running competitions.

Playing Keyboard.

Cookery.

Thank you so much!
  

Top answer

Hi, Here is the correction: _____________ Curriculum Vitae Objective: Mention your Objective as to the nature of job that you are intersted in. Summary: I have a proven track record of self-motivation, commitment, and determination in achieving my goals. I have also demonstrated negotiating and organizing skills, a sense of responsibility, and my capacity to work hard under pressure.

  • Hi, Here is the correction: _____________ Curriculum Vitae Objective: Mention your Objective as to the nature of job that you are intersted in.
  • Summary: I have a proven track record of self-motivation, commitment, and determination in achieving my goals.
  • I have also demonstrated negotiating and organizing skills, a sense of responsibility, and my capacity to work hard under pressure.
  • I am able to relate to a wide range of people, as proven by my varied work experiences.
  • Sc ( Mention degree) - 2008-2012 - Specialisation in Industrial Engineering from Escola Politecnica - Graduation expected in december/2012.
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Hi,
Here is the correction:

_____________
Curriculum Vitae

Objective: Mention your Objective as to the nature of job that you are intersted in.

Summary:

I have a proven track record of self-motivation, commitment, and determination in achieving my goals. I have also demonstrated negotiating and organizing sk
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Thank you so much!! but apart from the structure of the cv, do you think there are any gramatical or vocabulary mistakes?
Thanks!!
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Hi Frederic,
I have corrected your curriculum vitae to the best of my knowledge. However, I am re-writing one item in your cv i.e., in item 3 of projects undertaken heading. Please change it accordingly.

3. 2008-2009 Poli Júnior
Worked with consultancy projects and events as manager at Poli Júnior, junior enterprise of Escola Politécnica - USP.

Correction:

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