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Tad1270 Posted 20 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

could you correct my abstract, thanks

This report provides a summary of the author’s experiences on a student attachment at the X Ltd. The attachment, 22-weeks, was part of the author’s course in X University. The author’s duty was to improve the Quotation System and Quotation Manager for use by salse engineers. Quotation System is used in creating and storing the quotations. This system is also used by the manager to monitor and control the creating quotations process.

Two systems were designed by using Visual Basic Professional 6.0 with the supporting in MS SQL Server 2000 for database and Photoshop CS 9 for user interface. DSPLRFQ is reserved database for Quotations. Two systems use this database for verifying login also storing all details about quotations. Stored procedures were written to provide essential accessibility to the database in order to view, update and delete both quotations and company. Toolbar option is to increase the visually effects. File attachment allows staff can attach any thing to the quotation. Output word file is support for receptionist in creating contract. Many options have been added to this Quotation System which allow staffs can do whatever they want while changing inside data. The Manager system also allows manager can get statistics view by employers’ name and by any categories in quotations attributes.

Apart from the student’s direct role in the projects, his involvement in such a large software project gave his interesting insights into project management practice, designing entire software and the complete the Software Development Life Cycle.

To put it briefly, this report would serve as a summary of all the training received and work performed during the entire course of the Industrial Attachment at X Ltd.
  

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Hi, I think you already posted this at the end of last month. Were you not satisfied with the advice you got at that time? I don't think you have changed anything.

  • Hi, I think you already posted this at the end of last month.
  • Were you not satisfied with the advice you got at that time?
  • I don't think you have changed anything.
  • Best wishes, Clive
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Hi,

I think you already posted this at the end of last month. Were you not satisfied with the advice you got at that time? I don't think you have changed anything.

Best wishes, Clive
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I think he has changed it...
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Hi,

I still suggest:

1. You should put the focus much more on you, on what you learned.

2. You should not refer to yourself in the 3rd. person, as the student. Say 'I'.

Best wishes, Clive

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