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Hello everybody,
I want to improve my english-writing (I'm french) so I have writed a short essay, from an old school subject. Could you indicate mistakes I could do, or sentences which can be formulated better in this ? (and eventually in this message too ^^).
Thank you very much !
[Note that I write it above all to practice English, so the content is not very thought ]
Next year, I will have the chance to spend 6 months abroad. I think it is a very good opportunity and I enjoy it. And I think I would like to go to work in another country when I will have finished my studies. The first english-speaking country I want to go is Australia. Why ? First, if I want to go abroad, it is because I want to discover a completely new culture, life-style, way to thing. Australia is the France opposite on the globe. Moreover, it is localized next to the Equator. So, seasons are completely different. Here, the climate is tropical and itis very different than the oceanic climate, which we have in France. It is more hot, and the temperature rarely go down behind 20°C. But more rainy too, with wonderful storms in the rainy-season.
Because Australia is far, and it has a different climate, many other things are changed. Many new animals can be seen, like koalas, kangaroos... Because the Australian territory includes important tropical forest parts, it has the most important count of animal families in the word. I want to see this diversity. I think this completely different environment makes people completely different. And that is why I want to discover the Australian culture !
I want to improve my english-writing (I'm french) so I have writed a short essay, from an old school subject. Could you indicate mistakes I could do, or sentences which can be formulated better in this ? (and eventually in this message too ^^).
Thank you very much !
[Note that I write it above all to practice English, so the content is not very thought ]
Next year, I will have the chance to spend 6 months abroad. I think it is a very good opportunity and I enjoy it. And I think I would like to go to work in another country when I will have finished my studies. The first english-speaking country I want to go is Australia. Why ? First, if I want to go abroad, it is because I want to discover a completely new culture, life-style, way to thing. Australia is the France opposite on the globe. Moreover, it is localized next to the Equator. So, seasons are completely different. Here, the climate is tropical and itis very different than the oceanic climate, which we have in France. It is more hot, and the temperature rarely go down behind 20°C. But more rainy too, with wonderful storms in the rainy-season.
Because Australia is far, and it has a different climate, many other things are changed. Many new animals can be seen, like koalas, kangaroos... Because the Australian territory includes important tropical forest parts, it has the most important count of animal families in the word. I want to see this diversity. I think this completely different environment makes people completely different. And that is why I want to discover the Australian culture !
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Hello everybody. I want to improve my English writing (I'm French), so I've written a short essay, taken from an old school assignment. Could you indicate any mistakes, sentences which could be constructed better, etc.
- Hello everybody.
- I want to improve my English writing (I'm French), so I've written a short essay, taken from an old school assignment.
- Could you indicate any mistakes, sentences which could be constructed better, etc.
- )?
- Thank you very much!
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Hello everybody.
I want to improve my English writing (I'm French), so I've written a short essay, taken from an old school assignment. Could you indicate any mistakes, sentences which could be constructed better, etc. (and in this introduction too!)?
Thank you very much!
(Note that I'm writing this above all to practice English, so the content and conceptual basis may
I want to improve my English writing (I'm French), so I've written a short essay, taken from an old school assignment. Could you indicate any mistakes, sentences which could be constructed better, etc. (and in this introduction too!)?
Thank you very much!
(Note that I'm writing this above all to practice English, so the content and conceptual basis may
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