Could you comment on this sentence please?
Hi,
Could you comment on the following sentence please?
"Findings show that studying before class learning [by "class learning" I mean learning in the class] and book reading prior to attending the class, and discussing, reviewing the course content, collective thinking and consulting, mental restoration and refreshment in the class will result in fixing the course contents in the mind, strengthening the critique and analysis power (Bloom's taxonomy) and everlasting learning."
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" The subject of "will result" is extremely far from that verb. You have some parallel structure, but it breaks down. the class, discussing and reviewing...
- " The subject of "will result" is extremely far from that verb.
- You have some parallel structure, but it breaks down.
- the class, discussing and reviewing...
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It's wordy and repetitive, especially from "Findings" to "attending the class." The subject of "will result" is extremely far from that verb. You have some parallel structure, but it breaks down.
...the class, discussing and reviewing...
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