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Gillyflower Posted 6 years ago
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Could you comment on this please?

Hi,

Could you comment on the below paragraph please?

"A study among Korean College Students demonstrated similar results that there was a significant relationship between attitude and gender; females were more concerned about the harmful effects of GMFs on health (15). X et al., however, showed that there was no significant relationship between demographic characteristics and attitude (10). The reason for the discrepancy may be that the current and Korean College Students studies were conducted among educated individuals, while X et al. study was performed among supermarket customers, and nearly 80% of the participants were females."


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"A study among Korean c ollege s tudents demonstrated , with similar results , that there was a significant relationship between attitude and gender; females were more concerned about the harmful effects of GMFs on health (15). , however, showed that there was no significant relationship between demographic characteristics and attitude (10). The reason for the discrepancy may be that t he current study and the studies among Korean college students were conducted among educated individuals, while the study by X et al.

  • "A study among Korean c ollege s tudents demonstrated , with similar results , that there was a significant relationship between attitude and gender; females were more concerned about the harmful effects of GMFs on health (15).
  • , however, showed that there was no significant relationship between demographic characteristics and attitude (10).
  • The reason for the discrepancy may be that t he current study and the studies among Korean college students were conducted among educated individuals, while the study by X et al.
  • " Here are my suggestions for a few edits.
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"A study among Korean college students demonstrated, with similar results ,that there was a significant relationship between attitude and gender; females were more concerned about the harmful effects of GMFs on health (15). X et al., however, showed that there was no significant relationship between demographic characteristics and attitude (10). The reason for the discrepa

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