First, it needs to be divided into paragraphs. As it is, the length is offputting. Below, I have underlined some problem areas in grammar, punctuation, or vocabulary, and I have struck out unnecessary words (you may have to revise to reconstruct the sentences without these words): All the people around the world buy things everyday .
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