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MariaOana Posted 15 years ago
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Hey guys, hope you will help me to correct my mistakes, here is my essay.
1. Friendship can be damaged when you don’t know who your friends are
To us, friendship it’s the highest level of symphaty between two or more people.It is that certain connection , sometimes which brings joy and happiness, but also it is an unknown road on which we walk day by day.Having friends in this life, can have the meaning of the real Heaven on Earth, but not being confident, or not be able to know, of which category of people are we surrounded , it can be called as an unsafe jungle ,where we are just about to be devoured.
I will concede that my many friendships have broken as the years passed by, but now, i have a deep feeling that my few real friends, are indeed, the ones with which i will narrate our childhood tales, in the far away ages. I know that, life can be cruel many times, but if you are careful to pick the good choices in the right moment, it can ease this rough existence. Having lots of friends, for me , it doesnt mean that this will make you feel utterly confortable in the midst of them, just being popular in the society, will cause you more troubles wholesale.Popularity can express, that state when you are enclosed by many, maybe also, unknown people where everyone knows you , and at a particular situation everybody helps you, but on the other hand, it can be understood as a vicious circle, where the confidential information can merely be easly reavealed.
The real friends, the ones which always will stay behind your back, protecting you daily to not be chased by intruders, will forevermore help you in your needs, we can admit that we need friends in our lives, maybe even for the reason that we have the same importance to them, this is how a friendship, for me, works. In this case, the divulged secrets, are always deep closed in a place, called heart.We will , indeed, renew our friendship daily by being motivated to not be ever thrust by that certain friend. To have the real knowledge about who your real friends are, means that you have to not conceal the real YOU, your inner has to be known by your friends, because , otherwise the trust will miss completely .Your friends have to tell you every day what do they think about you, to not hide any feeling, in other case, that friendship can easly be damaged.Maybe at some moments of our life, we need to be alone to not be madly , altogether followed by friends, loneliness it is always welcome , but when you have to chose something very important for your future,they can outright give you an opinion.
For those type of people who are introverts, having friends, it is like to climb a difficult crest mountain, but when they find a real , maybe just one friend, will be like gods on Earth. In some points, they are fortunate to not be crushed daily by broken promises, but being lonely with all your blacken thoughts it is a hard life-style.
Friendship are blessed by God, you never have to forget about your old friends, but you have to be open everyday to make new ones, because in this way you will be always in a deep connection with various people who may help you , understand you and of course love you.
1. Friendship can be damaged when you don’t know who your friends are
To us, friendship it’s the highest level of symphaty between two or more people.It is that certain connection , sometimes which brings joy and happiness, but also it is an unknown road on which we walk day by day.Having friends in this life, can have the meaning of the real Heaven on Earth, but not being confident, or not be able to know, of which category of people are we surrounded , it can be called as an unsafe jungle ,where we are just about to be devoured.
I will concede that my many friendships have broken as the years passed by, but now, i have a deep feeling that my few real friends, are indeed, the ones with which i will narrate our childhood tales, in the far away ages. I know that, life can be cruel many times, but if you are careful to pick the good choices in the right moment, it can ease this rough existence. Having lots of friends, for me , it doesnt mean that this will make you feel utterly confortable in the midst of them, just being popular in the society, will cause you more troubles wholesale.Popularity can express, that state when you are enclosed by many, maybe also, unknown people where everyone knows you , and at a particular situation everybody helps you, but on the other hand, it can be understood as a vicious circle, where the confidential information can merely be easly reavealed.
The real friends, the ones which always will stay behind your back, protecting you daily to not be chased by intruders, will forevermore help you in your needs, we can admit that we need friends in our lives, maybe even for the reason that we have the same importance to them, this is how a friendship, for me, works. In this case, the divulged secrets, are always deep closed in a place, called heart.We will , indeed, renew our friendship daily by being motivated to not be ever thrust by that certain friend. To have the real knowledge about who your real friends are, means that you have to not conceal the real YOU, your inner has to be known by your friends, because , otherwise the trust will miss completely .Your friends have to tell you every day what do they think about you, to not hide any feeling, in other case, that friendship can easly be damaged.Maybe at some moments of our life, we need to be alone to not be madly , altogether followed by friends, loneliness it is always welcome , but when you have to chose something very important for your future,they can outright give you an opinion.
For those type of people who are introverts, having friends, it is like to climb a difficult crest mountain, but when they find a real , maybe just one friend, will be like gods on Earth. In some points, they are fortunate to not be crushed daily by broken promises, but being lonely with all your blacken thoughts it is a hard life-style.
Friendship are blessed by God, you never have to forget about your old friends, but you have to be open everyday to make new ones, because in this way you will be always in a deep connection with various people who may help you , understand you and of course love you.
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Hi Maria; I have made some suggestions and highlighted mistakes. I have put question marks where I did not understand what you wrote. You need to be careful of run-on sentences, comma splices, and using "it" as a subject when there is already another subject in the sentence.
- Hi Maria; I have made some suggestions and highlighted mistakes.
- I have put question marks where I did not understand what you wrote.
- You need to be careful of run-on sentences, comma splices, and using "it" as a subject when there is already another subject in the sentence.
- 1.
- Friendship can be damaged when you don’t know who your friends are To us, friendship it’s the highest level of symphaty between two or more people.
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Hi Maria; I have made some suggestions and highlighted mistakes. I have put question marks where I did not understand what you wrote.
You need to be careful of run-on sentences, comma splices, and using "it" as a subject when there is already another subject in the sentence.
1. Friendship can be damaged when you don’t know who your friends are
To us, friendship
You need to be careful of run-on sentences, comma splices, and using "it" as a subject when there is already another subject in the sentence.
1. Friendship can be damaged when you don’t know who your friends are
To us, friendship
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