Could you check this essay? #1

I agree that fewer people will watch TV in the future for the following reasons. Firstly, we can enjoy quality videos online today. YouTube, for example, is a very popular website where everyone can post exciting videos. If we can view such videos online, then we do not need television. Secondly, commercials on TV are annoying. Although we also have to put up with such advertisement in online videos, the amount of time we should watch them is far longer while watching television programs. For these reasons, I believe more and more people will stop watching TV.