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Gillyflower Posted 6 years ago
Grammar

Could you check the following please?

Hi,

Could you check the following please?

"Incorrect postures and unfavorable environmental conditions can result in physical injuries and musculoskeletal disorders, which will have many short- and long-term consequences, and are one of the common causes of occupational injuries and disabilities in developing countries and the most common causes of work-related disability, imposing financial pressure and medical expenses."

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I would break this into shorter sentences. For example: Incorrect postures and unfavorable environmental conditions can result in physical injuries and musculoskeletal disorders. These bring both short- and long-term consequences, and are one of the most common causes of occupational injuries and disabilities in developing countries.

  • I would break this into shorter sentences.
  • For example: Incorrect postures and unfavorable environmental conditions can result in physical injuries and musculoskeletal disorders.
  • These bring both short- and long-term consequences, and are one of the most common causes of occupational injuries and disabilities in developing countries.
  • They are also the most common causes of work-related disability, which creates financial pressure and increases medical expenses.
  • The language is also a bit stiff, but that may be acceptable, depending on your readers.
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I would break this into shorter sentences. For example:

Incorrect postures and unfavorable environmental conditions can result in physical injuries and musculoskeletal disorders. These bring both short- and long-term consequences, and are one of the most common causes of occupational injuries and disabilities in developing countries. They are also the most common causes of wor

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