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Domdom Posted 11 years ago
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Could you check my English writing, please?

When I was young, I believed that there was the other world beyond this world I lived. I believed I could move over and live there as I got a bit older and arrived at the age I could understand my situation where I was in. But I couldn't move over even thought the time passed. I thought there would be some changes of me or markable changes of surroundings when it was the time that I could move across the place. I believed that everything would be in change at a time. So I waited every day for the time to come. I was getting order as days passed. Finally when I realised I had been only watching people around me changing even before I changed myself at some point, I recognised that the world I lived would never change and never be able to change. And actually, people that I thought changed didn't even know that they changed theirselves.

Thank you!
  

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When I was young, I believed that there was the other world beyond this world I lived. I believed I could move over and live there as I got a bit older and arrived at the age I could understand my situation where I was in. But I couldn't move over even thought the time passed.

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  • When I was young, I believed that there was the other world beyond this world I lived.
  • I believed I could move over and live there as I got a bit older and arrived at the age I could understand my situation where I was in.
  • But I couldn't move over even thought the time passed.
  • I thought there would be some changes of me or markable changes of surroundings when it was the time that I could move across the place.
  • I believed that everything would be in change at a time.
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When I was young, I believed that there was the other world beyond this world I lived. I believed I could move over and live there as I got a bit older and arrived at the age I could understand my situation where I was in. But I couldn't move over even thought the time passed. I thought there would be some changes of me or markable changes of surround
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I rewrote the highlighted parts.

When I was young, I believed that there was the other world beyond this world I lived. I believed I could move over and live there as I got a bit older and turned / became the age I could understand at my situation where I was in. But I couldn't move over even thought the time passed. I thought there would be
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domdomWhen I was young, I believed that there was the other world beyond this world I lived.
When I was young, I believed that there was another world beyond this one that I lived in.
domdomI believed I could move over and live there
I believed I could move and live there
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When I was young, I believed that there was the another world beyond this world one that I lived in. I believed I could move over and live over there as I got a bit older and turned / became the age I could understand life. at my situation where I was in. But I couldn't
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Anonymousdomdomand turned / became the age I could understand at my situation where I was in.
I thought I could understand the situation about at the age of 16 and I am finally 16 now. So I can understand what world I'm living in.
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Thank you a lot! It really helps. =)
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