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Mitsuo23 Posted 6 years ago
Grammar
Could you brush up my writing? (118 words)
Hi,
the sentences below are from a summary section of my resume (first time in English).Would you brush it up, or correct grammatical errors?
5+ years of working or studying abroad. These experiences include:
-- A renovation project in Indonesia. This project was organized by JAIC to renovate a geological museum. Including local people, a number of construction companies were put together, and I participated in it as a chief remodeler.
-- A music festival in New York. This project invited many artists from the U.S and Japan, and was run by staff from a wide range of cultures and backgrounds. I worked for it as assistant producer.
4 years of programming and 2+ years of work experience in the IT industry. I worked at SANYO in the Overseas Department as negotiator for clients and coordinator across the departments inside the company.
Thank you.
-M
the sentences below are from a summary section of my resume (first time in English).Would you brush it up, or correct grammatical errors?
5+ years of working or studying abroad. These experiences include:
-- A renovation project in Indonesia. This project was organized by JAIC to renovate a geological museum. Including local people, a number of construction companies were put together, and I participated in it as a chief remodeler.
-- A music festival in New York. This project invited many artists from the U.S and Japan, and was run by staff from a wide range of cultures and backgrounds. I worked for it as assistant producer.
4 years of programming and 2+ years of work experience in the IT industry. I worked at SANYO in the Overseas Department as negotiator for clients and coordinator across the departments inside the company.
Thank you.
-M
Top answer
Some suggestions are as follows: 5+ years of working and studying abroad. These experiences include: A renovation project in Indonesia. This project was organized by JAIC to renovate a geological museum.
- Some suggestions are as follows: 5+ years of working and studying abroad.
- These experiences include: A renovation project in Indonesia.
- This project was organized by JAIC to renovate a geological museum.
- As Chief Remodeler, I organised and coordinated local people and several construction companies.
- A music festival in New York.
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Some suggestions are as follows:
5+ years of working and studying abroad. These experiences include:- A renovation project in Indonesia. This project was organized by JAIC to renovate a geological museum. As Chief Remodeler, I organised and coordinated local people and several construction companie
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