0
Raen Posted 18 years ago
Grammar
Could someone review this newsletter for grammar errors?
Thanks alot, I'd appreciate your help.
A Big Thank-you to wolves
for doing a great job at Food Drive. This year we
doubled the mount we collected last year. Boy Scouts leaders
told us they couldn't have done it without us. They sure got that right.
********************************************************************
Dates to remember/Announcements:
November Pack Meeting/Pinewood Derby will be on Tues. Nov. 18. Please go to xxx's for weigh-in anytime between 6:00pm and 8:00pm the day before (Monday). Note that the car should weigh no more than 5 oz.
There will be a den meeting on Nov. 24 @ xxx. We'll be doing a community service by raking leaves and fulfill a requirement in "xxx". Location for the service to be determined.
Unless noted otherwise, there will be 3 meetings in December: Dec. 1st, Dec. 8th and Dec. 15th. We will focuse our meetings on spreading love in our community. Specific activities will be announced. Relevant achievements in the Wolf Handbook are # 11b, 11c, and 11d.
This week in den meeting we completed Ach. #6b and 6c. Job-well-done to those who did the presentation on his collection, I was impressed! And if you forgot to bring your collection, please do it at home with your parents so they can check you off. Also complete 6a that's to be done with your family. (Note: the first part (requirement A) of Achievements 6-12 is always done at home, please treat it like scouts' homework in conjuction to what's been done in den meetings.)
~~~~~~~~~~~~~
As you know, I have asked to keep the scouts' handbooks for a few days to assess individual scout's progress and determine whether furthur efforts are required to bring it up to speed. According to the cub scout's program, there are basic guidelines for advancement, called the "Wolf Trail", to help scouts move to the next level of scouting, Bears.
The Wolf Trail consists of 12 Achievements under which there are different numbers of "requirements" lettered a, b, c...and so on. For any 3 achievements completed, the scout is awarded one yellow bead. Therefore a scout will have earned 4 yellow bead by his next birthday in order to obtain a Wolf badge to advance with honor to Bears. Idealy if a scout focuses one achievement a month, which is plausible, his advancement should be secured by his next birthday. Based on this rough measurement, each scout should have a different number of achievements to have been completed as of now depending on the month he was born in. By quantifying the progress, I think it's easier to see where the scout is at in terms of his progress and how much more effort, if any, is needed to help him move up to Bears.
Scouting is a concerted effort between the scout/his family and his leader, I would do my best to help your son achieve his goal. Here are the achievements your son has done and suggestions that can be considered:
A Big Thank-you to wolves
for doing a great job at Food Drive. This year we
doubled the mount we collected last year. Boy Scouts leaders
told us they couldn't have done it without us. They sure got that right.
********************************************************************
Dates to remember/Announcements:
November Pack Meeting/Pinewood Derby will be on Tues. Nov. 18. Please go to xxx's for weigh-in anytime between 6:00pm and 8:00pm the day before (Monday). Note that the car should weigh no more than 5 oz.
There will be a den meeting on Nov. 24 @ xxx. We'll be doing a community service by raking leaves and fulfill a requirement in "xxx". Location for the service to be determined.
Unless noted otherwise, there will be 3 meetings in December: Dec. 1st, Dec. 8th and Dec. 15th. We will focuse our meetings on spreading love in our community. Specific activities will be announced. Relevant achievements in the Wolf Handbook are # 11b, 11c, and 11d.
This week in den meeting we completed Ach. #6b and 6c. Job-well-done to those who did the presentation on his collection, I was impressed! And if you forgot to bring your collection, please do it at home with your parents so they can check you off. Also complete 6a that's to be done with your family. (Note: the first part (requirement A) of Achievements 6-12 is always done at home, please treat it like scouts' homework in conjuction to what's been done in den meetings.)
~~~~~~~~~~~~~
As you know, I have asked to keep the scouts' handbooks for a few days to assess individual scout's progress and determine whether furthur efforts are required to bring it up to speed. According to the cub scout's program, there are basic guidelines for advancement, called the "Wolf Trail", to help scouts move to the next level of scouting, Bears.
The Wolf Trail consists of 12 Achievements under which there are different numbers of "requirements" lettered a, b, c...and so on. For any 3 achievements completed, the scout is awarded one yellow bead. Therefore a scout will have earned 4 yellow bead by his next birthday in order to obtain a Wolf badge to advance with honor to Bears. Idealy if a scout focuses one achievement a month, which is plausible, his advancement should be secured by his next birthday. Based on this rough measurement, each scout should have a different number of achievements to have been completed as of now depending on the month he was born in. By quantifying the progress, I think it's easier to see where the scout is at in terms of his progress and how much more effort, if any, is needed to help him move up to Bears.
Scouting is a concerted effort between the scout/his family and his leader, I would do my best to help your son achieve his goal. Here are the achievements your son has done and suggestions that can be considered:
Top answer
Heading: 'amount' not 'mount'. Delete the colon and bracket Line 3: 'the car should not weigh more than 5oz' Perhaps 'carton' Line5: Location ... to be determined.
- Heading: 'amount' not 'mount'.
- Delete the colon and bracket Line 3: 'the car should not weigh more than 5oz' Perhaps 'carton' Line5: Location ...
- to be determined.
- ) Line6: Focus not focuse.
- Line 9: 'Job-well-done to those who did the presentation on his collection ' should be Job well done to those who did the presentation on their collections.
Get the Weekly English Kit 📬
New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.
2 Answers
0
Heading: 'amount' not 'mount'.
Delete the colon and bracket
Line 3: 'the car should not weigh more than 5oz' Perhaps 'car
Delete the colon and bracket
Line 3: 'the car should not weigh more than 5oz' Perhaps 'car
00
Thank you Igbruce, I really appreciate it. Sorry if "thanks" came a little late, I didn't know there's a reply. I have corrected the newsletter accordingly, phew! Thanks again.
Raen
p.s. I kept "5 oz" instead of "carton" as you suggested. 1) because that's what I was told what the limit weight was, 2)what's "carton"?
Raen
p.s. I kept "5 oz" instead of "carton" as you suggested. 1) because that's what I was told what the limit weight was, 2)what's "carton"?
0
Related Questions