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Jaskapa Posted 17 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Could someone proofread my letter of motivation for exchange?
Hi! I am going to apply for an exchange student program and we have to write a letter of motivation for that. I am from Finland and I haven't been writing anything in English for a looong time, so I'm wondering if somebody could be so kind and read this letter and give me advices how to improve it and maybe correct some mistakes I have made! 
Thanks in advance!
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Letter of Motivation
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a fourth-year medical student at the University of *** and I’m writing to apply for an exchange program at the University of the *** in country-region w:st="on" style=""> for the fall semester 2010.
During the last few years I’ve become more and more fascinated with the thought of studying, and maybe at some point of my career, even working abroad. I have come to realized that I would like to be involved in some kinds of international activities and projects in my future career, and by this I mainly mean projects concerning areas of global health and humanitarian work. I think it is much because of my growing interest in influencing health issues on a more international scale that I have also become more and more interested in getting some experience of living and studying abroad.
At the University of *** there are many courses that I find interesting and useful for my future career. I used to play ice hockey and do gymnastics for years when I was younger. After high school I quit those hobbies but I still do sports as much as I can. Because of my hobbies I have always been very interested in exercise physiology, which I would also have a chance to study at ***. There are also many other interesting and useful courses at *** such as cardio-respiratory rehabilitation, musculoskeletal rehabilitation, nutritional biochemistry and health promotion. I believe that deepening my understanding of these subjects would really be beneficial in my future profession as a doctor.
I’m quite sure that I’m capable of representing the University of ***** well abroad. I am very sociable person and I have no difficulties in getting along with different kinds of people. I speak and understand English quite well, so the language shouldn’t really cause any problems with my studies. I am also quite good at adapting to different environments and ways of life. I also love getting to know new people and I am very open to new experiences.
I have always been interested in learning new things and finding new aspects to life. I believe that living and studying in country-region w:st="on" style=""> would offer me a more international perspective on my future career and life in general. It would also be a great opportunity to study exercise physiology, musculoskeletal rehabilitation and other interesting and useful subjects. I believe it would be a great experience that would give me much more confidence, insight and self-knowledge to engage in different kinds of projects in my future studies and career.
Yours sincerely,
****** *****
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Letter of Motivation
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a fourth-year medical student at the University of *** and I’m writing to apply for an exchange program at the University of the *** in country-region w:st="on" style=""> for the fall semester 2010.
During the last few years I’ve become more and more fascinated with the thought of studying, and maybe at some point of my career, even working abroad. I have come to realized that I would like to be involved in some kinds of international activities and projects in my future career, and by this I mainly mean projects concerning areas of global health and humanitarian work. I think it is much because of my growing interest in influencing health issues on a more international scale that I have also become more and more interested in getting some experience of living and studying abroad.
At the University of *** there are many courses that I find interesting and useful for my future career. I used to play ice hockey and do gymnastics for years when I was younger. After high school I quit those hobbies but I still do sports as much as I can. Because of my hobbies I have always been very interested in exercise physiology, which I would also have a chance to study at ***. There are also many other interesting and useful courses at *** such as cardio-respiratory rehabilitation, musculoskeletal rehabilitation, nutritional biochemistry and health promotion. I believe that deepening my understanding of these subjects would really be beneficial in my future profession as a doctor.
I’m quite sure that I’m capable of representing the University of ***** well abroad. I am very sociable person and I have no difficulties in getting along with different kinds of people. I speak and understand English quite well, so the language shouldn’t really cause any problems with my studies. I am also quite good at adapting to different environments and ways of life. I also love getting to know new people and I am very open to new experiences.
I have always been interested in learning new things and finding new aspects to life. I believe that living and studying in country-region w:st="on" style=""> would offer me a more international perspective on my future career and life in general. It would also be a great opportunity to study exercise physiology, musculoskeletal rehabilitation and other interesting and useful subjects. I believe it would be a great experience that would give me much more confidence, insight and self-knowledge to engage in different kinds of projects in my future studies and career.
Yours sincerely,
****** *****
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Top answer
Doesn't anyone find mistakes? Because there could be a lot of them. :/ Or does anyone has any ideas how to make it better or something?
- Doesn't anyone find mistakes?
- Because there could be a lot of them.
- :/ Or does anyone has any ideas how to make it better or something?
- I must return this letter tomorrow or the day after tomorrow.
- I actually change my text just a little bit already and now it goes like this: Letter of Motivation Dear Sir or Madam, I am a fourth-year medical student at the University of xxxxx and I'm writing to apply for an exchange program at the University of the xxxxxxxxx in Australia for the fall semester 2010.
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Doesn't anyone find mistakes? Because there could be a lot of them. :/ Or does anyone has any ideas how to make it better or something? I must return this letter tomorrow or the day after tomorrow.
I actually change my text just a little bit already and now it goes like this:
Letter of Motivation
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a fourth-year medical student at the University of
I actually change my text just a little bit already and now it goes like this:
Letter of Motivation
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a fourth-year medical student at the University of
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