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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
Grammar
Could someone please check my grammar?
Hi guys, I'm preparing my CV to send out to some employers. Would someone be so kind as to check the following:
Ian is a client-focused Sales Executive, with strong networking acumen, he has a proven track record of building strong business relationships and strategic sales plans for his employers; all whilst adding value beyond expectation. He demonstrates an ability to quickly integrate and learn new markets, coupled with the ability to conduct sales from a consultative approach and close consistently. Further to the above Ian has:
Ian is a client-focused Sales Executive, with strong networking acumen, he has a proven track record of building strong business relationships and strategic sales plans for his employers; all whilst adding value beyond expectation. He demonstrates an ability to quickly integrate and learn new markets, coupled with the ability to conduct sales from a consultative approach and close consistently. Further to the above Ian has:
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Hello, I have only add an "a" and a comma to the text. Generally speaking, in my opinion, it's a solid text. Here's my suggestion : Ian is a client-focused Sales Executive, with a strong networking acumen.
- Hello, I have only add an "a" and a comma to the text.
- Generally speaking, in my opinion, it's a solid text.
- Here's my suggestion : Ian is a client-focused Sales Executive, with a strong networking acumen.
- He has a proven track record of building strong business relationships and strategic sales plans for his employers; all whilst adding value beyond expectation.
- He demonstrates an ability to quickly integrate and learn new markets, coupled with the ability to conduct sales from a consultative approach and close consistently.
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Hello,
I have only add an "a" and a comma to the text. Generally speaking, in my opinion, it's a solid text.
Here's my suggestion:
Ian is a client-focused Sales Executive, with a strong networking acumen. He has a proven track record of building strong business relationships and strategic sales plans for his employers; al
I have only add an "a" and a comma to the text. Generally speaking, in my opinion, it's a solid text.
Here's my suggestion:
Ian is a client-focused Sales Executive, with a strong networking acumen. He has a proven track record of building strong business relationships and strategic sales plans for his employers; al
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Hi,
For a start, why are you referring to yourself in the third person, as 'Ian'?
Say 'I'.
Clive
For a start, why are you referring to yourself in the third person, as 'Ian'?
Say 'I'.
Clive
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