could someone please check my essay?

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Hi, I'm novaI'm planning to post this on my blog so I'd really appreciate it if you could go through this and fix some errors I made. thank you there are so many options people have about how are they going to do with their lives. some people are lucky for knowing what they want to do with their limited resources like energy, time, knowledge, etc. However, quite a few of people who are still trying to figure out things that matter in life. I have to regretfully say that I am one of these people who have lost their sense of purpose.I envy my younger self who had this big dream which was studying abroad long story short here I am, writing this post from my tiny little room in Osaka,Japan.Well, let me tell you the ugly truth about having a dream or goal is that by the time you've fulfilled it ,this dream will undoubtedly vanish. you've got lost with nothing looks appealing enough to pursue anymore. sure, there must be another goal that you might want to accomplish, but it is just an accessory in your life so there are no passions in accomplishing this goalI'm fully aware of the fact that I already have this chance to do something great in my life, but the problem is I don't know what this something great is and this makes me terrified, I couldn't sleep for nights thinking about all the possibilities.what do I want?in what way should I help people?which problems do I want to solve?what am I willing to struggle for?what does matter in my life?and the lists keep getting longer. I really want to devote myself to a thing that I think it matters in my very short life as a human. I realized that time is very precious and I just can't waste it on something useless like what I'm doing right now.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

Every sentence must begin with a capital letter. You are inconsistent in following this basic rule. I have not highlighted this problem. But I have highlighted other parts of your text that have grammatical problems.
Please make an attempt to fix them, and re-post your blog entry. If you have any questions, just ask them in your re-posting.

there are so many options people have about how are they going to do with their lives. some people are lucky for knowing what they want to do with their limited resources like energy, time, knowledge, etc. However, quite a few of people who are still trying to figure out things that matter in life. (Fragment) I have to regretfully say that I am one of these people who have lost their sense of purpose.

I envy my younger self who had this big dream which was studying abroad long story short here I am, writing this post from my tiny little room in Osaka,Japan.

Well, let me tell you the ugly truth about having a dream or goal is that by the time you've fulfilled it ,this dream will undoubtedly vanish. you've got lost with nothing looks appealing enough to pursue anymore. sure, there must be another goal that you might want to accomplish, but it is just an accessory in your life so there are no passions in accomplishing this goal

I'm fully aware of the fact that I already have this chance to do something great in my life, but the problem is I don't know what this something great is and this makes me terrified, I couldn't sleep for nights thinking about all the possibilities.

what do I want?

in what way should I help people?

which problems do I want to solve?

what am I willing to struggle for?

what does matter in my life?

and the lists keep getting longer. I really want to devote myself to a thing that I think it matters in my very short life as a human. I realized that time is very precious and I just can't waste it on something useless like what I'm doing right now.

Nova nur alviyah · Answer

Thank you so much for checking my writing. I always write in my own language, so this will be my first blog entry in english and I'm very excited about this
I've fixed all of them but I had some difficulties with the fragmented part, so I decided to rewrite the first and second paragraph

There are so many options people have about what are they going to do with their lives. Many of us who know their passion in life set goals then work so hard with their limited resources like energy, time, knowledge to achieve these goals. On the other hand, the rest are still trying to figure out things that matter in life and feeling miserable because they know they could do better if only they had a purpose.
I had a big dream to study abroad when I was 14. It took more than 5 years and great effort for me to realize my dream but it's totally worth it. However, let me tell you the ugly truth about having a dream or goal is once you've fulfilled it, your dream will undoubtedly vanish at the same time. It's good when you have another thing to pursue that still excites you, but how if that's just it. Next thing you realize that you become one of the people who have lost their sense of purpose. You become like me.
I'm fully aware of the fact that I have a chance to do something great in my life, but the problem is I don't know what this something great is and this makes me terrified.
What do I want?
In what way should I help people?
Which problems do I want to solve?
What am I willing to struggle for?
What does matter in my life?
And the list keeps getting longer. I really want to devote myself to a thing that I think it matters in my very short life as a human. I realize that time is very precious and I just can't waste it on something useless like what I'm doing right now.

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what do you think?

There are so many options people have about what are they going to do with their lives. Many of us who know their passion in life set goals then work so hard with their limited resources like energy, time, knowledge to achieve these goals. On the other hand, the rest are still trying to figure out things that matter in life and feeling miserable because they know they could do better if only they had a purpose.
I had a big dream to study abroad when I was 14. It took more than 5 years and great effort for me to realize my dream but it's totally worth it. However, let me tell you the ugly truth about having a dream or goal is once you've fulfilled it, your dream will undoubtedly vanish at the same time. It's good when you have another thing to pursue that still excites you, but how if that's just it. Next thing you realize that you become one of the people who have lost their sense of purpose. You become like me.
I'm fully aware of the fact that I have a chance to do something great in my life, but the problem is I don't know what this something great is and this makes me terrified.
What do I want?
In what way should I help people?
Which problems do I want to solve?
What am I willing to struggle for?
What does matter in my life?
And the list keeps getting longer. I really want to devote myself to a thing that I think it matters in my very short life as a human. I realize that time is very precious and I just can't waste it on something useless like what I'm doing right now.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Much better!

Nova nur alviyah · Answer

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