Could someone help me polish my language?

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Hello, Guys. I will have a presentation tomorrow, I tried my best to write down 2 English Paragraph. However, they are still in Chinenglish. I am so worry that I cannot articulate my opinion. I really need some to help me to polish them. Is there anyone would like to help....

Thanks a lot...
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In the book Brand Sense, Martin points that research disclosed that when building brand, more sensory is stimulated, the more customer will be impressed; the stronger the relationship will be built between consumer and the brand. However, most brands still locate their consumption experience in 2D sensory world. But to success in this fierce marketing, some begin to shift to create multi -sensory experience to cater people in consumption activities.
2.Augmented Reality has already seen great popularity in enrich our interaction with our physical world. With AR tech being available on smart mobile devices, our sensory abilities are by no means enhanced that we can see the invisible detail. We can hear the tone that we could not hear. But this is only the tip of the iceberg. In the long term, AR tech will be applied to broader area.
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AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

Hi fansa
Welcome to English Forums! I have made some suggestions for your paragraphs.

1. In the book Brand Sense, the author, Martin Lindstrom, points out that research revealed ~~disclosed~~ that when building a brand, the more the senses are ~~sensory is~~ stimulated, the more the customer will be impressed; thus the stronger the relationship will be built between the consumer and the brand. However, most brands still place ~~locate~~ their consumption experiences in a 2D sensory world. But to succeed against ~~success in~~ this fierce competition ~~marketing~~, some will begin to shift to create multi -sensory experiences to cater to people during in consumption activities.
2.Augmented Reality has already achieved ~~seen~~ great popularity in enriching our interaction with the ~~our~~ physical world. With AR technology being available on smart mobile devices, our sensory abilities are by no means enhanced that we can see the invisible detail (I have no idea what you are trying to say in this sentence. If something is invisible, we cannot see it, by definition. ). We can hear the tone that we could not hear. But this is only the tip of the iceberg. In the long term, AR tech will be applied to broader areas.

CalifJim · Answer

I've had to make a few assumptions about what you're trying to say. You may want to make further changes later. The parts in blue are incomprehensible to me, I'm sorry to say.

In reviewing the research in his book Brand Sense, Martin reports the finding that stimulation of the senses is important when an enterprise undertakes to build its brand. The more the senses are stimulated, the more the customer's interest will be aroused, and the stronger the consumer's relationship will be with the brand. Most brands still locate their consumption experience in the 2D sensory world. But to succeed in a fiercely competitive market, some have begun to shift their attention to creating multi-sensory experiences to appeal to people in consumption activities.

Augmented Reality has already achieved great popularity by enriching our interactions with the physical world. With AR technology already available on smart mobile devices, our sensory abilities are by no means enhanced that we can see the invisible detail. We can hear the tone that we could not hear. But this is only the beginning. In the future, AR technology will be applied more broadly.

CJ

Fansa · Answer

Thanks very very much!

CalifJim · Answer

AlpheccaStarsMartin Lindstrom

Geez, Alphecca! Out of what mysterious vapor did you pull "Lindstrom"? Did you research this on Google first? No fair, no fair!!!

CJ

AlpheccaStars · Answer

CalifJim
AlpheccaStarsMartin Lindstrom
Geez, Alphecca! Out of what mysterious vapor did you pull "Lindstrom"? Did you research this on Google first? No fair, no fair!!! CJ

All's fair in Love and War, and on EnglishForward. [6]
I just transported over into the Google-dimension trying to make sense of the poster's paragraphs by looking at some of the book's reviews and picking out its rather esoteric contemporary marketing jargon.

CalifJim · Answer

AlpheccaStarsesoteric marketing jargon

You can say that again!

CJ

Anonymous · Answer

It will need some extra effort to put, so you can speak and as well write a good english. I am sure you can learn it within a month.

Thanks,
Raj,P

CalifJim · Answer

AnonymousIt will need some extra effort to put

And you can say that again too!

CJ

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