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Hello to all,I'm Jan van Arkel from the Netherlands. I've wrote a letter for an English assignment but I think I'ts not that good. Could someone please help me correct it? It has to be really professional._Letter________________________Dear Sir / Madam,Last Wednesday I’ve read your pitch conscript for the production of your new film. The commission seems to be an exiting challenge where I really want to put all my creativity into. To make a chance I respond as quickly as I could.I’m an enthusiastic multimedia designer that mastered the latest techniques on video and sound editing. I use a lot of Adobe software packages but I also could get along with other applications. For a unique, working and stylish film intro I’m your man. If you gave me the opportunity you won’t regret it.My last project was to design a web application for Hilversum Kamera & Visie. I really enjoyed it but now I want to do some more on filming. I heard that the target group are especially little children. I’ve a little sister and a little (neighbour boy?) where I have to watch over very often. So I think I’ve enough (a word for: ability to think as a child?) I need.You Really Rock Entertainment, LTD  is a really well known producer to me and I hope I could work for them. I’ll hope so get a reply as soon as possible. If you have any questions you could always e-mail or call me!Yours Faithfully,Jan van Arkel_Letter________________________I hope someone could help me. I really would appriciate it .Greetings,Jan

Waïti · Accepted Answer

First a word of caution... I'm not a native speaker so there are things I may overlook in your text... :-)

'Last wednesday I've read...'
Should be 'I read' since you specify when exactly in the past it happened.

'...exiting challenge'
Missing 'c' in 'exiting', should be 'exciting'.

'... where I really want to put all my creativity into...'
I think 'into which I really want to put all my creativity' is better. Or maybe 'in which I really want...'.

'... to make a chance I respond as quickly as I could...'
I would make it 'to have a better chance I'm responding as quickly as I can...'

'... designer that mastered the latest...'
I find 'in' is missing : should be '...mastered in the latest...'.

'... get along with other applications...'
Never heard the phrasal verb 'get along' with anything else than a person : get along with somebody. You might want to use some other expression here. You could say 'I could also get acquainted with other applications very easily' for instance.

'... if you gave me the opportunity you won't regret it...'.
Should be 'if you give me... you won't regret it'. Using the preterite tense with 'gave' then it has to be 'wouldn't'. With the present tense 'give' then you can use 'won't'.

'... my last project was to design...'
I feel it would sound better '... was about designing...' or you could improve it by using some other verb. Maybe 'my last project consisted in designing' ?

'... I want to do some more...'. I think 'do' doesn't say much here. You want to learn some more ? Or maybe to acquire more experience ? You can make it more specific than with 'do'.

'... target group are...'
Should be 'is' if group is singular : 'target group is' or 'target groups are'.

'I've a little sister... very often'.
It doesn't feel right that you contract 'have' into ''ve' here.
You may want to make it 'I have a little sister and a little neighbour whom I watch over very often'.

'So I think I've enough...'
You could say 'I think/believe I have a good sense of how children behave and react' or better yet 'I think I have developped a good sense...'

'I'll hope so get a reply a soon as possible'.
I'd rewrite the whole sentence : 'I'm looking forward to getting a reply soon' or something like that.

'If you have any question...'
I think the usual sentence goes : 'Should you have any question, do not hesitate to get back to me.'

Voilà... That's it... Best luck with your application to this job : it sounds really exciting.

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