Could someone correct my TOEFL-essay about Ernest Hemmingway?

Question: Sumarize the points made in the lecture, explaining how they relate to the points made in the reading. Use specific examples and details from both passages in your answer

My answer:
Both passages discuss the writing of Ernest Hemmingway. They talk about the same points, but express different views on them.
First, the lecturer says that Hemmingway’s experience in journalism affected his style of writing, and inspired other writers, like Raymond Carver. However, the lecturer doesn’t give any specific example to support that point. The author states that Hemmingway included too much of personal experience both in his fiction and nonfiction.
Next, the lecture talks about the use of rhetorical devices by Hemmingway. She says agrees with the author that they are simple, but she adds that this simplicity provides an intellectual challenge to the reader. Hemmingway is able to write about dense ideas in a very direct way. The reading states that Hemmingway doesn’t deserve so much praise due to that simple style, where a lot of description is lacking.
Thirdly, the professor mentions that Hemmingway tried to write from a woman’s perspective. She is not critical of it, but she agrees with the author that feminists wouldn’t like Hemmingway’s attitude towards women. The author says that women are depicted as one-dimensioned on purpose, because Hemmingway didn’t trust women.
To summarize, both passages talk about Hemmingway’s writing. Both mention that journalism affected the stories, the usage of rhetorical devices is controversial and the view on women is negative. The author is more critical than the lecturer.

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