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CoSmO_hk Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Could someone correct my grammar, please
“Never give up” is an encouraging word to young people. But if we encounter a very hard work, we should give up may be the best. However, ‘Never give up’ is good words to encourage young people to do something.
First of all, nowadays, more and more young people are easy to give up doing some works. One of the reasons is that they may lack encouragement and determination. Secondly, their parents spoil them since they were born. Many families have a maid so that they may not do anything at home and that they can order the maid to do anything. Thirdly, they live in a warm family. They encounter some matters which no matter is very easy to be solved, they also find their parents to solve it. Nowadays, many parents have an only child, so parents put excess parental love to take care of the only child. As a consequence, overall, ‘Never give up’ is a active words to young people. This word brings a best message to young people for doing something.
However, some matter should be gave up is the best, which you do not have ability to do if you insist on solving it, this behavior only brings a great harm to you and may causes you very tired. Therefore, parents and teachers should teach them that when they should give up and never give up. Sometime, when you encounter some problems, change your mind may be better than ‘never give up’. For example, if you continue using only one solution but cannot solving the problem, then you should give up this solution and think other solution which can solve the problem, finally, the problem may be solved as soon and it can save the waste time or money.
In my opinion, ‘Never give up’ is the best word for all people, I also always use this word to remind myself and encourage anyone, whatever matter we do. However, sometime give up is better than never give up.
First of all, nowadays, more and more young people are easy to give up doing some works. One of the reasons is that they may lack encouragement and determination. Secondly, their parents spoil them since they were born. Many families have a maid so that they may not do anything at home and that they can order the maid to do anything. Thirdly, they live in a warm family. They encounter some matters which no matter is very easy to be solved, they also find their parents to solve it. Nowadays, many parents have an only child, so parents put excess parental love to take care of the only child. As a consequence, overall, ‘Never give up’ is a active words to young people. This word brings a best message to young people for doing something.
However, some matter should be gave up is the best, which you do not have ability to do if you insist on solving it, this behavior only brings a great harm to you and may causes you very tired. Therefore, parents and teachers should teach them that when they should give up and never give up. Sometime, when you encounter some problems, change your mind may be better than ‘never give up’. For example, if you continue using only one solution but cannot solving the problem, then you should give up this solution and think other solution which can solve the problem, finally, the problem may be solved as soon and it can save the waste time or money.
In my opinion, ‘Never give up’ is the best word for all people, I also always use this word to remind myself and encourage anyone, whatever matter we do. However, sometime give up is better than never give up.
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Hi CoSmO_hk There's a few things I didnt agree with your paper but nevermind it, just some differences of standpoint . e. the end of the 2nd paragraph.
- Hi CoSmO_hk There's a few things I didnt agree with your paper but nevermind it, just some differences of standpoint .
- e.
- the end of the 2nd paragraph.
- Anyway, following is some corrections, I hope it helps you somewhat.
- CoSmO_hk “Never give up” is an encouraging word to young people.
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Hi CoSmO_hk
There's a few things I didnt agree with your paper but nevermind it, just some differences of standpoint . There's also some arguments not really logical and convincible, i.e. the end of the 2nd paragraph. Anyway, following is some corrections, I hope it helps you somewhat.
There's a few things I didnt agree with your paper but nevermind it, just some differences of standpoint . There's also some arguments not really logical and convincible, i.e. the end of the 2nd paragraph. Anyway, following is some corrections, I hope it helps you somewhat.
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