Could someone check this poem for me?

In a mysterious place
I can see nothing else
Except the sun light up on my face
Revealing my better days
Then Someone says
Live…

Many ways I am walking on
All back directions are simply gone
Past chooses, mistaken decisions
No turning back, now I suffer
I’m not giving up ambitions
Making two steps forward, crossing the line
Starting the war with my own mind…

I try to rescue myself from cursed cage
Correct my behavior, be an effective mage
That’s making me mad
Conspiracy I’ve never had
My own mind wishes me dead
Anarchy, kingdom attacked
King lies completely robbed

It’s me who let them break in
Those enemies number one hundred
Carrying swords kind of two handed
Well smart, they’re supported
By violence, bitches, money stolen 
Consequence…my mates will proceed
Strike once to lure
Then backstab kill me dude
Gonna wake up in hell, used
Even if I would be saved this time
What does it mean?
I’ma still be surrounded by them - sins

Wounds won’t disappear
Just turn into scars you fear
It’s hella big deal
With all the pain I feel
Giving all I got to regenerate
So hard to raise up well
I might be too weak
I am ready to admit

Soon solved my problem
Defeated me, like no man 
None has power such strong
To break me all life long
I’m experienced, overcame me
Still I want world to be
An oasis without fighting spree
I’ma make my life like it was meant to be made
Cause I’m still breathing, got faith

Thanks