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Snuppelina Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

Could someone check a sentence please

Hi, I know this sentence sounds clumsy, how can I improve it?

In this regard, I would like to ask you to inform us about all the replacements of materials and adjustments of technological processes carried out by your specialists during the pre-production phase according to the contracts.
  

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It isn't too bad. I have difficulty understanding what "according to the contracts" applies to though. Do you mean that the contracts stipulate that they must inform you of these things?

— GPY

  • It isn't too bad.
  • I have difficulty understanding what "according to the contracts" applies to though.
  • Do you mean that the contracts stipulate that they must inform you of these things?
  • " seems to be assuming or anticipating that there will be some replacements and adjustments.
  • " be better?
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It isn't too bad. I have difficulty understanding what "according to the contracts" applies to though. Do you mean that the contracts stipulate that they must inform you of these things? Also, "all the ..." seems to be assuming or anticipating that there will be some replacements and adjustments. Do you mean to imply this, or would "any ..." be better?
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Thank you!
In which way to edit it to make it good instead of not too bad?Emotion: smile
The product is supposed to be manuf
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Sorry, I still don't understand what you mean. Do you mean that the products were initially manufactured in compliance with the contracts, but then later some changes were made that were outside the original agreement in the contract?
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GPY, yes, I mean that! They had to substitute some materials, etc.
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In that case, the thing that you are describing is not "according to the contracts", so just delete that phrase.
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