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Uroczyalezajety Posted 11 years ago
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Could somebody check my writing? please :D

CREEPY PARTY
Halloween is an important event especially in America and it is believed on this night the souls of the dead came back. We celebrated it at school and now I want to tell you how it was preparing and everything about attraction.
Costumes and masks was made by teenagers full of enthusiasm. We bought some pumpkins and cut out the inside to make the lanterns which looked extremely scared and horrific. Everyone was immensely excited and we waited to beginning of the party.
At one point of during the evening, prizes were awarded to the pupils who had the best costumes. Games were organized and even teachers to everyone’s delight participated in it and it looked like they had a good time. When the party finally ended, everyone wanted to stay longer but we could not because fallowing day we should have gone to the school and teachers told us we would have other occasions to do parties in the future.
This party brought back memories of my childhood when I was exciting when I was dressing up in scary costumes and I was going from house to house screaming “Trick or treat”.
If you want to have a good party you have to have some trusted and responsible people who help you in preparing everything. You should ask headmaster and other teachers if they give you permission to organize a party. You have to invite all pupils because the more people, the better party!
  

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Here are my suggestions/corrections: CREEPY PARTY Halloween is an important event , especially in America. and It is believed that on this night the souls of the dead came back on this night . We celebrated it at school and now I want to tell you how we prepared for it was preparing and everything about what went on .

  • Here are my suggestions/corrections: CREEPY PARTY Halloween is an important event , especially in America.
  • and It is believed that on this night the souls of the dead came back on this night .
  • We celebrated it at school and now I want to tell you how we prepared for it was preparing and everything about what went on .
  • unclear ] Costumes and masks were was made by teenagers full of enthusiasm.
  • We bought some pumpkins and cut out the inside to make the lanterns which looked extremely scared and horrific.
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Here are my suggestions/corrections:

CREEPY PARTY
Halloween is an important event, especially in America. and It is believed that on this night the souls of the dead came back on this night. We celebrated it at school and now I want to tell you how we prepared for it was preparing and everything about what went on

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