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Chiara Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
could please check my writing?
0 Hello, could you please check my writing task? Any suggestion and comment is very welcomed. 02 br
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00 Thank you very much, Chiara 02 br
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00 The organisers of a conference on environmental issues have invited delegates to take part in an essay-writing 02 br
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00 15.00 Tuesday 12th June 02 br
00 Dr.Gerald Symonds 02 br
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00 Nuclear policy as an environmental solution 02 br
00 Carbon fuels such as coal and oil are running out and their emissions are threatening the fragile ecosystem of our planet. 02 br
00 Dr. Symonds will be discussing his view that nuclear power will be the best way to provide safe and affordable energy whilst 02 br
00 protecting the environment. 02 br
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00 Dr.Symonds’proposal of using nuclear energy as a main solution to the running out of carbon fuel resources represents a quite attractive suggestion for the energy policy of many countries. 02 br
00 Despite the interest that this proposal might stir up, the use of nuclear power represents a dangerous shortcut for the solution of the problem mentioned above. 02 br
00 Nowadays, infact, when facing a new challenge, modern science must pay attention to the sustenability of its projects. That means that every solution proposed of current environmental problems musts prevent any possible damage and future risk either for nature and human beings. 02 br
00 It is necessary to rember though, that unfortunately nuclear energy can’t assure any safety at all on this regard, yet. 02 br
00 The terrible effects of the use of nuclear power can still be seen on a large part of Chernobil’s population, even though many years have passed since the tragic nuclear desaster occurred. 02 br
00 Although it is undeniable that, as Dr.Symonds discussed, the knoledge and control of nuclear energy have improved very much in the last decades, we are not sure of the consequences of the nuclear scores on a long term use for nature and human beings. Even worse, in case of an accident, nothing assures that we won’t assist to the same environmental desaster as the one in Chernobil. 02 br
00 So, if nuclear energy is not able to garantee our safety, how can we consider it as a real solution for our problems? 02 br
00 Every environmental issue, as the running out of energy resources, needs to be faced with a perspective view of our future. As far as we know, other energy resources respond to this very important request, such as sun, wind, water or hydrogen. Only “clean” energies nowadays can be reckoned by science a smart and useful supply to the running out of carbon fueles, without impeding risks for the environment. 0-
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00 Thank you very much, Chiara 02 br
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00 Task: 02 br
00 The organisers of a conference on environmental issues have invited delegates to take part in an essay-writing 02 br
00 competition in which they must respond to an issue raised by one of the seminars.You attended the seminar detailed 02 br
00 in the following extract from the conference programme and have decided to write an essay(300-350 words),reacting 02 br
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00 15.00 Tuesday 12th June 02 br
00 Dr.Gerald Symonds 02 br
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00 Nuclear policy as an environmental solution 02 br
00 Carbon fuels such as coal and oil are running out and their emissions are threatening the fragile ecosystem of our planet. 02 br
00 Dr. Symonds will be discussing his view that nuclear power will be the best way to provide safe and affordable energy whilst 02 br
00 protecting the environment. 02 br
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00 Dr.Symonds’proposal of using nuclear energy as a main solution to the running out of carbon fuel resources represents a quite attractive suggestion for the energy policy of many countries. 02 br
00 Despite the interest that this proposal might stir up, the use of nuclear power represents a dangerous shortcut for the solution of the problem mentioned above. 02 br
00 Nowadays, infact, when facing a new challenge, modern science must pay attention to the sustenability of its projects. That means that every solution proposed of current environmental problems musts prevent any possible damage and future risk either for nature and human beings. 02 br
00 It is necessary to rember though, that unfortunately nuclear energy can’t assure any safety at all on this regard, yet. 02 br
00 The terrible effects of the use of nuclear power can still be seen on a large part of Chernobil’s population, even though many years have passed since the tragic nuclear desaster occurred. 02 br
00 Although it is undeniable that, as Dr.Symonds discussed, the knoledge and control of nuclear energy have improved very much in the last decades, we are not sure of the consequences of the nuclear scores on a long term use for nature and human beings. Even worse, in case of an accident, nothing assures that we won’t assist to the same environmental desaster as the one in Chernobil. 02 br
00 So, if nuclear energy is not able to garantee our safety, how can we consider it as a real solution for our problems? 02 br
00 Every environmental issue, as the running out of energy resources, needs to be faced with a perspective view of our future. As far as we know, other energy resources respond to this very important request, such as sun, wind, water or hydrogen. Only “clean” energies nowadays can be reckoned by science a smart and useful supply to the running out of carbon fueles, without impeding risks for the environment. 0-
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02 br 00 Nowadays, 01 font 00 in fact, 02 font 00 01 font 00 [but I would delete it anyhow] 02 font 00 when facing a new challenge, modern science must pay attention to the sustenability of its projects. Symonds discussed, the 01 font 00 knoledge 02 font 00 and control of nuclear energy have improved very much in the last decades, we are not sure of the consequences of the nuclear scores on a long term use for nature and human beings. 02 br 00 Every environmental issue, as the running out of energy resources, needs to be faced with a perspective view of our future.
- 02 br 00 Nowadays, 01 font 00 in fact, 02 font 00 01 font 00 [but I would delete it anyhow] 02 font 00 when facing a new challenge, modern science must pay attention to the sustenability of its projects.
- Symonds discussed, the 01 font 00 knoledge 02 font 00 and control of nuclear energy have improved very much in the last decades, we are not sure of the consequences of the nuclear scores on a long term use for nature and human beings.
- 02 br 00 Every environmental issue, as the running out of energy resources, needs to be faced with a perspective view of our future.
- As far as we know, other energy resources 01 font 00 respond to this very important request 02 font 00 , such as sun, wind, water or hydrogen.
- 02 br 01 font 00 I think you need to do quite a lot of re-writing.
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0 Dr.Symond 01 font 00 s’s p 02 font 00 roposal of using nuclear energy as a main solution to the running out of carbon fuel resources represents 01 font 00 quite an 02 font 00 attractive suggestion for the energy policy of many countries. 02 br
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0 Hello Feebs, thank you ver much for your help. Well, yes... I had this fear... that it could be repetitious. It is always very useful to read comments from other people. I'll have a look at it and try to improve it as soon as I can. 02 br
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0 Dr.Symonds's 00 p 00 roposal of using nuclear energy as a main solution to the running out of carbon fuel resources represents quite an attractive suggestion for the energy policy of many countries. 02 br
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0 Hello, if you have time, I would like to ask if the text I tried to correct the other day is a bit improved comparing to the first one I wrote. 02 br
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01 cite 10 Chiara 12 cite 10 Dr.Symonds's 10 p 10 roposal of using nuclear energy as a main solution to the running out of carbon fuel resources represents quite an attractive suggestion for the energy policy of many countries.Despite the interest that this proposal might stir up, the use of nuclear power represents a dangerous shortcut fo
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0 Hello Feebs, thank you very very much. You've been really kind. 02 br
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00 The text is much better now, but I perfectly agree with you that it still very repetitious: there are not more than a couple of concepts altogether. 02 br
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00 I'll do my best to improve the structure and sense of the paragraphs. 02 br
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00 The text is much better now, but I perfectly agree with you that it still very repetitious: there are not more than a couple of concepts altogether. 02 br
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00 I'll do my best to improve the structure and sense of the paragraphs. 02 br
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