Could I ask for validation of my composition?

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I have written this letter, but I am not certain that the sentences is correct.

The phrases in bold are a causal clause; please validate my composition, especially the phrases in bold.

I was very glad to receive your email not anticipating, for you are easygoing.
However, It's true for me to be very happy that I heard from you.
As we had a few hot day here in Korea the summer even though it was rainy season mid-June to late July, we had a little rain, I had more comfortable days than any other year.
I didn't travel the summer for some reason.
Maybe, It is unlikely that I would travel for a while.
I would fully take a trip to Canada, but don't know when that will be.
I hope I sip a cup of coffee and have some talks with you while having a meal and watch your home
with a wide and gorgeous garden.

p.s. If I will be there, could you show me your beautiful house?

Grammarfreak · Accepted Answer

I was very glad to receive your email not anticipating, for you are easygoing.
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As we had a few hot day here in Korea the summer even though it was rainy season mid-June to late July, we had a little rain, I had more comfortable days than any other year.
I didn't travel the summer for some reason.
Maybe, It is unlikely that I would travel for a while.
I would fully take a trip to Canada, but don't know when that will be.
I hope I sip a cup of coffee and have some talks with you while having a meal and watch your home
with a wide and gorgeous garden.

I had trouble following your frame of mind when you were writing this email. You use " I was very happy..." but logically one would say " I am very happy to have received your email...". I have no clue what this meant: not anticipating, for you are easygoing. I don't understand this line and see no need to use 'however: However, It's true for me to be very happy that I heard from you.

Maybe, It is unlikely that I would travel for a while. - Do you mean: It is unlikely that I will travel anytime soon?

I would fully take a trip to Canada, but don't know when that will be. Do you mean to say: I would like to take trip to Canada, but I don't know when yet ?

As we had a few hot day here in Korea the summer even though it was rainy season mid-June to late July, we had a little rain, I had more comfortable days than any other year. You have no punctuation so I can only guess:
We had a few hot days here as it is still summer here in Korea. Even though rainy season is between June and late July, we had little rain this year. I don't understand what this meant relative to the previous sentence: I had more comfortable days than any other year.

I hope I sip a cup of coffee and have some talks with you while having a meal and watch your home
with a wide and gorgeous garden. You have too many thoughts in this passage which made it sound clumsy.

Maybe something like this: I am looking forward to seeing you sometime in the future, and chatting over a nice dinner, topped off with a cup of delicious coffee. Perhaps you can show me your beautiful home.

You need ti rewrite your letter if you want it to sound natural.

Park sang joon · Answer

Thank you grammarfreak for your sincere advice and accounts, I will retry this letter, and then I hope you validate this again^^

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