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Park sang joon Posted 12 years ago
Grammar
Could I ask for validation about my very short text?
There was a bit delay; however, even though it was the situation distinctly not to execute the work because of raining then, he gave us the feedback abut that situation, and when we know It wouldn't stop raining, he ventured the work taking pictures in spite of continuously raining.
I'd like to ask for validation about my composition.
In advance, thank you for your help.
I'd like to ask for validation about my composition.
In advance, thank you for your help.
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My overall comment is that you are trying to cram far to much into a single sentence. This is causing structural problems and also making it very, very difficult for he reader to understand your meaning. I suggest you reword it into two or perhaps three sentences.
- My overall comment is that you are trying to cram far to much into a single sentence.
- This is causing structural problems and also making it very, very difficult for he reader to understand your meaning.
- I suggest you reword it into two or perhaps three sentences.
- Then we can comment more effectively on your other issues.
- Clive
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My overall comment is that you are trying to cram far to much into a single sentence. This is causing structural problems and also making it very, very difficult for he reader to understand your meaning.
I suggest you reword it into two or perhaps three sentences. Then we can comment more effectively on your other issues.
I suggest you reword it into two or perhaps three sentences. Then we can comment more effectively on your other issues.
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Thank you Mr.Clive for your advice; I will follow your advice to divide my text into two or three sentences
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