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A horror movie.A young atist inherited from his aunt old house. A new house, she always get the nightmares which that can't explain.A day, Daniela found old diaries, and recount a sadness in the story of her name Adaline who have been lived this house. The secrect in the past that was going to show up.Thanks.

Kimkim8450 · Accepted Answer

Could anyone check for errors in this small writing,please
A horror movie.
Daniella, a young artist inherited an old house from his aunt . At the house, she always got the nightmares which can't be explained. One day, Daniela found out some old diaries, which recounted a sad story of Adaline - who had been lived in this house. The secrets in the past are going to be unfolded.Thanks.
I did my best

not sure about the last sentence

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kimkim8450Daniella, a young artist inherited an old house from his aunt .

Daniella is a female name so, you should write her, not "his".

You should not leave a space between the last word and the full stop.

Daniella, a young artist, inherited an old house from her aunt.

kimkim8450At the house, she always got ~~the~~ nightmares

You have not mentioned any, particular nightmares so, you don't need "the".

Had, would be a more natural word than "got".

At the house, she always had nightmares

kimkim8450One day, Daniela found ~~out~~ some old diaries,

You should spell the name consistently. You first wrote it with two examples of the letter l.

Using the word "out" with "found", does not fit in that context. Found out does not mean the same thing as found. See the definitions here http://www.macmillandictionary.com/dictionary/british/find-out and http://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/english/found

One day, Daniella found some old diaries,

kimkim8450who had ~~been~~ lived in this house.

who had lived in this house.

kimkim8450~~The~~ secrets in the past are going to be unfolded.

You have not mentioned any, particular secrets so, you don't need "the".

Revealed, would be a more natural word than "unfolded".

Secrets of the past are going to be revealed.

kimkim8450unfolded.Thanks.

It would better to separate "thanks" from the paragraph.

Kimkim8450 · Answer

thanks a lot

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