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Chen Dong Song Posted 15 years ago
Letter Writing
Could Anyway help me to correct my motivation letter
I have written a motivation letter for my universit exchange program, i always have grammatical problem with English writting. I hope someone could help me with this letter, and give some other suggestions!
Does this letter long enough, are there any words, sentence or things that are not proper to use in a lettter.
in the letter i use "Eurocentrism or Westernization" , i am not sure if its too stronge to use them in this letter, if its, how should i change it. and last paragraph, should i write longer, or its enough. and does the letter long enough as a motivation letter, did i miss something?
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Respected Sir/Madam:
I am an undergraduate student from Corvinus University of Budapest. My major is Sociology, All of my seminars and lectures are taught in English. As a second year student, I already start preparing for my future thesis. I am specialized on the field of Social Media, thus I will develop my thesis on this direction. I mainly focus on how social network has impact on young generation, and how do young generation change their world through variants social media tools.
I am writing to apply for the exchange BA Social Sciences program in Chinese at Fudan University in the autumn 2012. Fudan University has one of the best Social Sciences faculty among other Chinese University, also this will be a great opportunity for me to socialize again with people from homeland. I migrated with my family to Hungary since 2001, till now I only been back to China twice, each time stayed for about one and half month. Besides the feeling of nostalgia, it is also very important for me as a sociology student to expand my field knowledge. I gain quite rich academic knowledge in Conrvinus University on sociological field, also some others as well. But so far, most of concepts of classes are tent be Eurocentrism or Westernization, it is crucial for me to obtain sociological knowledge about other continent, such as China. The best way to do achieve this is to be there as personal. China has an unpredictable change society, me, as a Chinese origin, it would be a lose not to study it and knowing it.
I went to Hungarian elementary school, and graduated in an English High school. For many years, I always participated in Hungarian language class in order to concrete my Hungarian language skill. Beside study, I also work as a computer technician. I used to be an employee of Chinese computer Service Company located in Budapest. Customers were mainly from Chinese community, but we also provide service to local. I quitted after 4 years, due to intense study. Anyway, I still work as a computer technician as freelancer. In the summer of 2012, I got my other job. I start working with a Chinese business man as a Contact Assistant and translator. My task is finding suppliers for him inside European countries, and if it is necessary I will go with him on business trip. Because of double jobs I have got, I am able to sustain myself with basic living cost.
I am looking forward for study in my country again after many years, I believe it will be an unforgettable experience in my life.
Your Sincerely
Name
Does this letter long enough, are there any words, sentence or things that are not proper to use in a lettter.
in the letter i use "Eurocentrism or Westernization" , i am not sure if its too stronge to use them in this letter, if its, how should i change it. and last paragraph, should i write longer, or its enough. and does the letter long enough as a motivation letter, did i miss something?
______________________________________________________________________________________________
Respected Sir/Madam:
I am an undergraduate student from Corvinus University of Budapest. My major is Sociology, All of my seminars and lectures are taught in English. As a second year student, I already start preparing for my future thesis. I am specialized on the field of Social Media, thus I will develop my thesis on this direction. I mainly focus on how social network has impact on young generation, and how do young generation change their world through variants social media tools.
I am writing to apply for the exchange BA Social Sciences program in Chinese at Fudan University in the autumn 2012. Fudan University has one of the best Social Sciences faculty among other Chinese University, also this will be a great opportunity for me to socialize again with people from homeland. I migrated with my family to Hungary since 2001, till now I only been back to China twice, each time stayed for about one and half month. Besides the feeling of nostalgia, it is also very important for me as a sociology student to expand my field knowledge. I gain quite rich academic knowledge in Conrvinus University on sociological field, also some others as well. But so far, most of concepts of classes are tent be Eurocentrism or Westernization, it is crucial for me to obtain sociological knowledge about other continent, such as China. The best way to do achieve this is to be there as personal. China has an unpredictable change society, me, as a Chinese origin, it would be a lose not to study it and knowing it.
I went to Hungarian elementary school, and graduated in an English High school. For many years, I always participated in Hungarian language class in order to concrete my Hungarian language skill. Beside study, I also work as a computer technician. I used to be an employee of Chinese computer Service Company located in Budapest. Customers were mainly from Chinese community, but we also provide service to local. I quitted after 4 years, due to intense study. Anyway, I still work as a computer technician as freelancer. In the summer of 2012, I got my other job. I start working with a Chinese business man as a Contact Assistant and translator. My task is finding suppliers for him inside European countries, and if it is necessary I will go with him on business trip. Because of double jobs I have got, I am able to sustain myself with basic living cost.
I am looking forward for study in my country again after many years, I believe it will be an unforgettable experience in my life.
Your Sincerely
Name
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Sorry, for 2 same posts, i try to edit it, but some how, it created a new post. this will be the orginal one: Please, delete this post
- Sorry, for 2 same posts, i try to edit it, but some how, it created a new post.
- this will be the orginal one: Please, delete this post
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