Could anyone please try to re-write this sentence for me but try not to change the meaning

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The photographer Elinor Carruci challenges the stereotype of a mother with the most challenging subject, motherhood. When she gave birth to her twins, she discovered the difficulties that are part of every new mother’s experience. She mainly practised on capturing intimate moments by using her camera do deal with the hard moments she has had as a mother. With the dramatic use of light and shadow she managed to turn out most of the images touching, sensual, joyful, these attracting images consists of moments that are personal and universal.

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Clive · Accepted Answer

Why do you want to rewrite it? It seems fine.

Dni483 · Answer

Because I tried to re-write this with my own words, I don't know how else to change it, it seems similar

I took it from here:

When Elinor Carucci gave birth to her twins, she discovered the highs and lows that are part of every new mother’s experience. A noted photographer accustomed to documenting intimate moments, Carucci used her camera to deal with the maelstrom of emotions. She followed her babies as they grew into toddlers, then children, with their own complex relationships. Carucci’s dramatic use of light and shadow and her uncanny ability to capture the freedom with which children express themselves imbue her images with a marvelous clarity. By turns touching, surprising, sensual, joyful, and unflinching, these striking pictures convey moments that are at once personal and universal

It's for my essay ..

Clive · Answer

Do you mean the first version is yours?

Dni483 · Answer

Yeah I would like to re-write the first one, that's the one I did, copying from the second version <img class='emoticon' style='Width:19px;Height:19px;' data-delaysrc='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/1.gif' src='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/1.gif' alt='Emotion: smile'/>

Clive · Answer

I don't understand.
If you write it, why do you want to re-write it?

Dni483 · Answer

The second version was taken from the internet, the first version I tried to re-write is with my own words but I still think it's possible to be changed even a bit more.  That's what I want from someone to write it not copy it as I don't know what else to write

Dni483 · Answer

Anyone?

Clive · Answer

I'm just going to edit this a bit.

The photographer Elinor Carruci challenges the stereotype of a mother with the most challenging subject, motherhood. When she gave birth to her twins, she discovered the difficulties that are part of every new mother’s experience. She mainly practised no on capturing intimate moments by using her camera do deal with the hard moments she has had as a mother. With the dramatic use of light and shadow she managed to turn out images that are usually touching, sensual, joyful. These attractive images consist of moments that are personal and universal.

You need to reword the italic sentence. It has several problems, including tense.

Dni483 · Answer

Thank you for giving it a try, I appreciate this!

Could anyone please try to re-write this sentence for me but try not to change the meaning

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