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Rewritable DVD-R/ CD-R and USB flash drives:
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I have reformatted CD-R/DVD-R with Windows 7 to became rewritable . It was successfully; however, I am afraid to say that I didn't notice any significant benefits. I was expecting that when I convert a unrewritable CD-R/DVD-R into rewritten,(How to Rewrite on a DVD-R and a CD-R Without any Burning Software), I will be able to burn any files, such as ISO files and so on on this CD-R/DVD-R, which has been reformatted during these steps, with any burning software.Then, When I want to burn other files, such as ISO files on the same CD-R/DVD-R, I will just delete the last files, and then I will burn the new files. However, the reverse has been happened. When I have tried burning an ISO file on this CD/DVD, I have noticed that burning software notifies me that this CD/DVD is not empty.

It was right that I have become able to delete, move and copy to this CD-R/DVD-R like I deal with USB flash drives. However, this doesn't matter at all. If I want to do these features, I would prefer to use USB flash drives instead of these CDs-R/DVDs-R which have been reformatted as UDF file system by Windows 7 Operating System. Because there are three main advantages to using USB flash drives. Firstly, USB flash drives have usually a capacity which is usually much bigger than CD-R/DVD, especially CD-R -[Because USB flash drives have usually a much more capacity than CD-R/DVD, especially CD-R ]. Secondly, They are flexible and easy to move. Finally, They are more safety and keeping for data. Finally, USB's are quick to copy/paste from or to them.

On the other hand, there are significant problems with use of the CD's. In the first place, using CD's can cause in losing data after a long period of time, for instance, if you have copied data on a CD, and then CD has been scratched. So the data could be lost. In additions, the copy and paste to and form CDs is more slowly than USB flash drives. Lastly, CDs and even DVDs need a driver to be readable.

In conclusion, I believe that, despite the feature of an UDF file system which enables you to copy, delete and move to CDs-R/DVDs-R without enabling you to erase or overwritten on CDs-R/DVDs-R burnt by any burning software and then burn other new data on them , USB flash drives are essential to modern technology and that advantages of using them are far greater than the disadvantages.

KrisBlueNZ · Accepted Answer

Rewritable ~~DVD-R/ CD-R~~ DVD-R/CD-R (no gap) and USB flash drives:

I have reformatted CD-R/DVD-R discs with Windows 7 to ~~became~~ make them rewritable . (no space before period.) It was ~~successfully~~ successful~~; however,~~ , but I am afraid to say that I didn't notice any significant benefits. I was expecting that when I convert converted a an unrewritable (suggest a read-only or a non-rewritable) CD-R/DVD-R ~~into rewritten~~ to be rewritable, (space after comma) (How to Rewrite on a DVD-R and a CD-R Without any Burning Software), I will would be able to burn any files, such as ISO files and so ~~on on~~ ("on on" is clumsy; I suggest "... and so on, onto") this CD-R/DVD-R, ~~which has been reformatted during these steps,~~ (unnecessary) with any burning software. space after period Then, ~~When~~ when (capital letter is not needed after a comma) I want wanted to burn other files, such as ISO files, (comma here) on the same CD-R/DVD-R, I will would just delete the ~~last~~ suggest old files, ~~and~~ then ~~I will~~ burn the new files. However, the ~~reverse~~ suggest opposite ~~has been happened~~ suggest has occurred or is true. When I have tried burning an ISO file on onto this CD/DVD, ~~I have noticed that~~ unnecessary the burning software notifies notified or suggest told me that ~~this~~ the CD/DVD is was not empty.

I guess the section I've highlighted in blue is a hyperlink to an article that describes how to make a CD-R/DVD-R rewritable? If so, you should say "... to be rewritable (as described in How to rewrite ... software), I would be able to burn any file ...".
The yellow highlights are for consistency in tense. You're starting your explanation in past tense, with "I WAS expecting" (which makes sense), so you should continue it in past tense, as indicated by the other corrections in yellow highlight.
Generally I would use "burn ONTO" instead of "burn ON" because it's more accurate, and because ON is used in other senses and using ONTO for burning avoids the clumsy "on on" that I pointed out.
You've made a few mistakes with spaces around punctuation. Periods and commas should have whitespace AFTER them, and NOT BEFORE them. A capital letter is required after a period, but not after a comma.

~~It was right that~~ what is 'it'? I suggest As described in the linked article, I ~~have become~~ am now able to delete, move and copy to ~~this~~ the CD-R/DVD-R like I deal with USB flash drives. However, this doesn't ~~matter~~ suggest help me at all. If I want to ~~do these features~~, you can't 'do' features; you can do these things or you can have these features I would ~~prefer to~~ suggest rather use USB flash drives instead of these ~~CDs-R/DVDs-R~~ CD-R/DVD-Rs ~~which have been reformatted as UDF file system by Windows 7 Operating System~~ suggest simply ... instead of UDF-rewritable CD-R/DVD-Rs. Because you're using 'because' to continue the previous sentence, so you shouldn't use a period there; you should use a comma instead there are three main advantages to using USB flash drives. suggest because USB flash drives have three big advantages. Firstly, USB flash drives ~~have usually~~ unidiomatic; should be usually have a capacity which is ~~usually~~ unneeded repetition much bigger than CD-R/DVD, especially CD-R -[Because USB flash drives have usually a much more capacity than CD-R/DVD, especially CD-R]. Suggest Firstly, USB flash drives usually hold more data than DVD-Rs, and much more than CD-Rs. Secondly, ~~They~~ they (capital letter not required after comma) are flexible and easy to move. Finally, ~~They~~ they are ~~more safety~~ and ~~keeping for data~~ both of those phrases are ungrammatical; I suggest they are more reliable or they are less susceptible to data loss ('more reliable' is simpler and better, I think). Finally, ~~USB's~~ USB flash drives are ~~quick to copy/paste from or to them~~ ungrammatical again; you can say it's quick to copy/paste from or to a USB flash drive or simply USB flash drives are quick to use.

Also you have two "finally"s. I would make each of those points more concise and combine them into a single sentence: "USB flash drives usually hold more data than DVD-Rs, and much more than CD-Rs; they are quicker to insert and remove, and much quicker to read and write; and they are much more reliable than plastic discs."

On the other hand, there are significant problems with use of ~~the~~ no definite article here ~~CD's~~ I prefer CDs (no apostrophe) because this is a plural and plurals don't have apostrophes, but many people do use apostrophes for plurals of abbreviations so you could argue that it's not an error. ~~In the first place~~ Firstly, using CD's can ~~cause in losing data~~ ungrammatical after a long period of time, for instance, if you have copied data on a CD, and then CD has been scratched. Suggest CDs can become unreliable with age, or if scratched. ~~So the data could be lost~~ unnecessary. In ~~additions~~ addition, ~~the~~ copy and paste to and ~~form~~ from CDs is ~~more slowly~~ slower than USB flash drives suggest data transfer to and from CDs is much slower than USB flash drives. Lastly, UDF-rewritable CDs and even DVDs need a driver to be readable.

In conclusion, I believe that, despite the feature of an UDF file system which enables you to copy, delete and move to ~~CDs-R/DVDs-R~~ CD-R/DVD-Rs without enabling you to erase or ~~overwritten~~ overwrite on ~~CDs-R/DVDs-R~~ CD-R/DVD-Rs burnt by any burning software and then burn other new data on them no space before comma , USB flash drives are essential to modern technology and that advantages of using them are far greater than the disadvantages. Suggest by comparison, USB flash drives have many important advantages and no significant disadvanges.

As an aside, the reason why UDF-rewritable CDs and DVDs can't be used with general CD/DVD writing software to burn ISO images is simply that they are not actually rewritable; the UDF rewritability feature only makes it APPEAR as though they are. You cannot erase data that's been written to a CD-R or DVD-R. Whenever you delete a file on a UDF-rewritable disc, the data remains on the disc; it's simply marked as deleted. Therefore, the disc will eventually become full even if there appers to be no data on it. Normal disc writing software that writes standard format discs actually needs a physically blank disc. A UDF-rewritable disc is not physically blank, even if there appear to be no files on it.

Mohammad Lardhi · Answer

Thank you so much indeed,

I would just like kindly you to confirm these things for me:

KrisBlueNZWhen I have tried burning an ISO file on onto this CD/DVD, I have noticed that unnecessary the burning software notifies notified or suggest told me that this the CD/DVD is was not empty.

I noticed you deleted 'tried' and left:
'When I have ~~tried~~ burning..'
But I think this is not any tense at all
I think it would have been written:
'When I have been burning..', ' When I have burnt..' or ' when I have tried burning'

KrisBlueNZIf I want to do these features, you can't 'do' features; you can do these things or you can have these features I would prefer to suggest rather use USB flash drives instead of these CDs-R/DVDs-R CD-R/DVD-Rs which have been reformatted as UDF file system by Windows 7 Operating System suggest simply ... instead of UDF-rewritable CD-R/DVD-Rs.

As long as the usage of 'd rather" and 'd prefer':
However, when we are talking about specifics, would rather is used as an alternative to would prefer to followed by an infinitive. Would rather is very common in spoken English and is often abbreviated to 'd rather. It is used in this form with all personal pronouns:

So I think that:
If I want to have these features, I would rather to use USB flash drives instead of these of ....

KrisBlueNZThe yellow highlights are for consistency in tense. You're starting your explanation in past tense, with "I WAS expecting" (which makes sense), so you should continue it in past tense, as indicated by the other corrections in yellow highlight.

if I want to speak about a past event, can a past, present perfect and past perfect tense be interchangeably used ( I use a past tense in some sentences and present perfect in some other sentences in the paragraph) in the paragraph or I must only use a past tense in the whole paragraph? As I noticed in my last paragraph, there is interchangeable between a past and present perfect tense in the paragraph. For instance,
However, the opposite has occurred or is true.

I think that it would have been better if it had been written:
However, the opposite occurred or was true.

I hope you will be understanding my language

As an aside, the reason why UDF-rewritable CDs and DVDs can't be used with general CD/DVD writing software to burn ISO images is simply that they are not actually rewritable; the UDF rewritability feature only makes it APPEAR as though they are. You cannot erase data that's been written to a CD-R or DVD-R. Whenever you delete a file on a UDF-rewritable disc, the data remains on the disc; it's simply marked as deleted. Therefore, the disc will eventually become full even if there appers to be no data on it. Normal disc writing software that writes standard format discs actually needs a physically blank disc. A UDF-rewritable disc is not physically blank, even if there appear to be no files on it.

Then why the writer of the article said that UDF-rewritable CD-R/DVD-Rs. are really a nice feature. For me, I didn't notice any nice feature.

KrisBlueNZ · Answer

The yellow highlighting in the first paragraph isn't quite right. There's a bug with the posting software.
Every time when there are two words with yellow highlight next to each other, the first one is supposed to be crossed out and replaced by the second one.
There is one place where only one word is highlighted, "tried". I do not mean to delete this word. I was just highlighting it because it defines the tense of the sentence, and the other yellow highlighted words need to be changed to match that tense.

RATHER is not used with an infinitive; it's just used with a verb.
"I would RATHER TO use a USB flash drive" - wrong
"I would RATHER USE a USB flash drive" - right.

You say that "However, the opposite is true" would be better written as "However, the opposite WAS true". You're right that I'm changing from past tense to present tense by using "IS true" but this is appropriate, because that situation still exists now, in the present tense. In other words, "the opposite" WAS true then, and it IS STILL true NOW.
Let me give you an example. "I TRIED to call John with my cellphone. The call DIDN'T go through. So I TURNED it off, and then TRIED to turn it back on. But it WILL not turn on". In this case, the story is told in the past tense until the last step, where it jumps to present tense. This is because the cellphone IS NOW in the state where it WILL not turn on. I have used a shortcut. I could have said "... I TURNED it off, and then TRIED to turn it back on. It DID NOT turn on. I TRIED it again, but it DID not turn on. Now, every time I TRY to turn it on, it DOES not turn on". The first example is just shorter and more to-the-point than the full explanation. I hope you can see how the change from past to present tense makes sense in these story-telling examples.

The author of the article about using UTF-rewritable discs was comparing UTF-rewritable discs with one-time-writable discs, which is the usual way CD-Rs and DVD-Rs are used. You usually collect a lot of files and burn them onto the disc in one go, then you can't use that disc for anything else. By comparison with this traditional use of CD-R/DVD-Rs, the UTF-rewritable feature is a lot more convenient. USB flash drives are MUCH easier to use, as you said. Perhaps the article was written before USB flash drives became widely available.

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