Could anyone check my story?

0 I would like not only if anyone could check this story, but also if you could give me some opinions...02br
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00Rob got up from his bed when he heard that terrible noise. It was as if the wind was hitting the door, but everything outside was very calm. He couldn't understand. He was alone in the house, and had turned on all the alarms, so it was difficult to think that anybody could enter and avoid the alarm system.02br
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00He wasn't the kind of man who gets scared easily, so he decided to go downstairs to see what was happening. To feel secured, he got the gun that had bought some time ago only because he liked duck hunting.02br
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00When he reached the dinning room, he saw that nobody was there but he could hear some kind of noises aorund the room. It was impossible to explain where they were coming from. Suddenly , some fuzzy figures appeared behind him. All the lights were off so he couldn't see clearly what they were based on. But he understood rapidly that they weren't going to harm him. It was not what the situation appeared to be.02br
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00They didn't talk at all, but he was silently told to sit on the armchair that was in front of the TV set. Without knowing how, they managed to turn on the TV and a film appeared on the screen, but it had something particular. It was him who was on the TV!. It was showing him when he was 3 years old. And there were also his parents and all people he had met until that moment. Again, he couldn't understand, but he couldn't pronounce a simple word either. He was there, sitting in front of the TV watching how his life went on.02br
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00Meanwhile, all the noises had disappeared. He knew it as it was obvious that they were to catch his attention. They guided him to the dinning room where those strange people or whatever they were, had been waiting for him.02br
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00All his memories, absolutely all his life was going by on the TV and as time passed, Rob began to feel more and more tired. He couldn't manage to stand up. The only thing he was able to do was to watch TV.02br
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00This scenario lasted an hour. At the end, those criatures felt satisfied and left him free. They abandoned the house and disappeared in the same way as they had appeared, but Rob wasn't the same as before. He couldn't remember anything. It was as if all his life experience had disappeared without leaving any trace. He couldn't remember his name or what he was doing there.02br
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00When he was found next morning, Rob was still alive but he never spoke another coherent word as long as he lived.02br
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00Thank you in advance02br
00Eduardo 0-