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XxNADJAxx Posted 20 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Could anybody review my second essay?? Please :) ***
0 This is my second essay. I really appreciate the effort put by considerated people in this forum. Thanks a lot 05 0 02 br
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00 Long time ago I lived in a quite street where there weren’t any pubs or restaurants. I felt it was a boring place to live. Back then, I felt like to live in a place bustling with people at nights and crammed with pubs and restaurants. Nowadays, I live in a street with many pubs and restaurants but now I miss those quite days. In this essay I will look at some of the arguments for and against the building of a new restaurant in my neighbourhood. 02 br
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00 Having a nearby restaurant in your neighbourhood offers you some advantages. First, you can go out to dinner without taking your car so you don’t have to worry about drinking or not. A further point is that your neighbourhood became a popular place. So you are not longer worried about being on your way home passing by empty and scary streets. Finally, if the new restaurant has got a fast-food service you will have the possibility of buying the dinner or the lunch there and taking it home instead of preparing it by yourself. 02 br
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00 However I don’t like the idea of having a new restaurant in my neighbourhood. Customers of the restaurants usually come by car and the street is always full of cars. The people that come from outside park their cars anywhere. You usually can find cars parked in the drive. At nights when I come back from somewhere I waste more than 20 minutes to find some room to park my car. Another point is the noise produced by the people who are taking something in the restaurant. During warmer days in the summer I leave open the windows of my house and sometimes it is impossible to fall asleep while you are hearing the people speak out there in the restaurant. Finally, most restaurants allow people to smoke. I can’t put up with people who light their cigarette while I’m eating. 02 br
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00 In conclusion, although I like to live in a lively neighbourhood and go out to dinner without taking my car I prefer to live in a place that I can sleep in summer’s night and don’t waste my time looking for a place to park. 010id 1
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00 Long time ago I lived in a quite street where there weren’t any pubs or restaurants. I felt it was a boring place to live. Back then, I felt like to live in a place bustling with people at nights and crammed with pubs and restaurants. Nowadays, I live in a street with many pubs and restaurants but now I miss those quite days. In this essay I will look at some of the arguments for and against the building of a new restaurant in my neighbourhood. 02 br
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00 Having a nearby restaurant in your neighbourhood offers you some advantages. First, you can go out to dinner without taking your car so you don’t have to worry about drinking or not. A further point is that your neighbourhood became a popular place. So you are not longer worried about being on your way home passing by empty and scary streets. Finally, if the new restaurant has got a fast-food service you will have the possibility of buying the dinner or the lunch there and taking it home instead of preparing it by yourself. 02 br
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00 However I don’t like the idea of having a new restaurant in my neighbourhood. Customers of the restaurants usually come by car and the street is always full of cars. The people that come from outside park their cars anywhere. You usually can find cars parked in the drive. At nights when I come back from somewhere I waste more than 20 minutes to find some room to park my car. Another point is the noise produced by the people who are taking something in the restaurant. During warmer days in the summer I leave open the windows of my house and sometimes it is impossible to fall asleep while you are hearing the people speak out there in the restaurant. Finally, most restaurants allow people to smoke. I can’t put up with people who light their cigarette while I’m eating. 02 br
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00 In conclusion, although I like to live in a lively neighbourhood and go out to dinner without taking my car I prefer to live in a place that I can sleep in summer’s night and don’t waste my time looking for a place to park. 010id 1
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0 Hey, there. 02 br 02 br 00 I'm sure someone (somewhere) will reply with suggestions about the grammar in the essay. ) Anyhow, I just want to make a point or two.
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- 02 br 02 br 00 I'm sure someone (somewhere) will reply with suggestions about the grammar in the essay.
- ) Anyhow, I just want to make a point or two.
- 02 br 02 br 00 For instance, of course you can go out to dinner without taking your car, but is that really the same as going out to, say, McDonald's?
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0 Hey, there. Is this essay for anything in particular or are you just...writing for the fun of it? 02 br
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00 I'm sure someone (somewhere) will reply with suggestions about the grammar in the essay. (The first few sentences especially are a bit awkward and misphrased.) Anyhow, I just want to make a point or two. ^^; 02 br
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00 Be specific if you can. 02 b
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00 I'm sure someone (somewhere) will reply with suggestions about the grammar in the essay. (The first few sentences especially are a bit awkward and misphrased.) Anyhow, I just want to make a point or two. ^^; 02 br
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0 Hi Kin. First of all, thank you for your help. 02 br
00 I'm writting essays just because I want to improve my writting skills and I think this is the best way to get it. As you say, I should be more specific and add some more examples. I see your point 05 0 00 I'll put it in practise next time. 02 br
00 Thanks Kin 05 1 010id 511id 1
00 I'm writting essays just because I want to improve my writting skills and I think this is the best way to get it. As you say, I should be more specific and add some more examples. I see your point 05 0 00 I'll put it in practise next time. 02 br
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0 Hi again, 02 br
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00 Kin has some helpful points there. Regarding the grammar, there are a few points I indicate here from the first two paragraphs. Would you like to have a look at these and then try and see if you can find anything similar in the final two paragraphs? (I don’t think there are many things to find) 02 br
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00 - Nick 02 br
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00 Kin has some helpful points there. Regarding the grammar, there are a few points I indicate here from the first two paragraphs. Would you like to have a look at these and then try and see if you can find anything similar in the final two paragraphs? (I don’t think there are many things to find) 02 br
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0 Hi Nick. sorry for replying so late but I wasn't at home yesterday. I want to thank you for being so considerate 05 0 02 br
00 Could you explain me this point? 02 br
00 as you are trying to express an event that you are looking forward to, is not possible to say "I felt like to" instead of "I wanted"? 02 br
00 are there any mistake or error in the final two paragra
00 Could you explain me this point? 02 br
00 as you are trying to express an event that you are looking forward to, is not possible to say "I felt like to" instead of "I wanted"? 02 br
00 are there any mistake or error in the final two paragra
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0 Hi Nadja, 02 br
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00 You are right that we use “I feel like” to mean something we want to do. However, it is used when the want or desire is not particularly strong - We don’t really mind whether we do the thing or not, or we are unsure. 02 br
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00 If you say “I feel like going out tonight”, then you are in the mood for going ou
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00 You are right that we use “I feel like” to mean something we want to do. However, it is used when the want or desire is not particularly strong - We don’t really mind whether we do the thing or not, or we are unsure. 02 br
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00 If you say “I feel like going out tonight”, then you are in the mood for going ou
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0 Hi Nick. I now understand how "feel like" must be used. 02 br
00 I have just finished my second essay and I think is a little better than the early ones. I'm improving thank to your help. 02 br
00 I hope within a months I can review essays from other people. 02 br
00 Thank youuuuu ^^ 02 br
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00 I have just finished my second essay and I think is a little better than the early ones. I'm improving thank to your help. 02 br
00 I hope within a months I can review essays from other people. 02 br
00 Thank youuuuu ^^ 02 br
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