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Lucus Ong Posted 17 years ago
Grammar

Could anybody correct this fiction for me?

I separated them into five posts ,as I thought if you are busy you can correct only one post for me.But later on I found that it would be harder for you to understand the article,so I combined them together again .But you can also correct only one paragraph for me.

Great thanks in advance

I saw a black cat in the middle of a road, while I was going to school."Ah, the car almost hit the black cat!" I screamed. I rushed into the cat and hugged it to the another side of the road. “Ah, the cat is standing with two feet. It's waving at me."



I was awaken by bells at night.When I went out of my house, I found a pocession of cats stop at the entrance of my house. They said that they had prepared a party. They sticked together and carried me to a dilapidated corner. A small tunnel was in the corner, They covered my eyes with a black cloth.

After going through the tunnel.We were smallen into the side of dust. They sent me to a place where had much food and numerous of cats then took the cloth away. The black cat stood on a stage and asked me to go to the stage. The black cat appreciated me and wanted me to dance with her.

After the party, they didn't want to send me back. They wanted me to stay there and become their prince."Oh no, I want to go back to my own world."

After going through the tunnel.We were smallen into the side of dust. They sent me to a place where had much food and numerous of cats then took the cloth away. The black cat stood on a stage and asked me to go to the stage. The black cat appreciated me and wanted me to dance with her.

After the party, they didn't want to send me back. They wanted me to stay there and become their prince."Oh no, I want to go back to my own world."



They had pulled me into a room then change my clothes into another clothes which were made of mouse skin.

After changing clothes. They locked me in a room. Three cats took off one of the roof tile . They said that they wanted to save me. They wanted me to prepared to promise the cat to let those cats relieve so that they could save me. What I could do was to believe them.



When the black cat almost kissed me on the stage, they jumed onto the stage, put sword on the neck of the black cat and threaten other cats not to get closer to us. We ran up tp the top of the building then went into the hot balloon and threw the black cat away. When other cats got there. We had been very near to the tunnel.

After leaving the tunnel, I ran back to my house.I was very afraid .Fortunately, they didn't run after me into my house.

From that moment, I have never seen a cat.When I went back to the place, the tunnel had vanished. I still don't understand why that type of miracle would happen on me.

  

Top answer

Hi I saw a black cat in the middle of a road, while I was going to school. " I screamed. I rushed into over to the cat and hugged carried it (safely) to the an other side of the road.

  • Hi I saw a black cat in the middle of a road, while I was going to school.
  • " I screamed.
  • I rushed into over to the cat and hugged carried it (safely) to the an other side of the road.
  • "Ah, the cat is standing with two feet on its hind legs .
  • "
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I saw a black cat in the middle of a road, while I was going to school. "Ah, the car almost hit the black cat!" I screamed. I rushed into over to the cat and hugged carried it (safely) to the another side of the road. "Ah, the cat is standing with two feet on its hind legs. It's waving
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Vctory Ong
I saw a black cat in the middle of a road, (no comma here) while I was going to

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