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Rozy Posted 19 years ago
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could anyone correct my essay and see if it needs anything more to be good



the wind was blowing from east to west we could not see anything beyond two meters. I remember at the moment I regretted the trip I regretted what I wished for more than 6 years to be here in Alaska to join a past of the research team for the wild bear research to achieve something to try experience living in such condition with not enough food ,warm water ,supplies a hard life that might let me appetite some of what I left back home.





The wend kept blowing that day with its freeze breeze along the way we were 3 people going on a research mission for our project, we thought for a minute that we were lost however then we kept on walking and walking.



We heard a voice from far away we tried to track it down it was a voice unexplainable we were hasted to follow it but we though it might led us to an answer we got near the voice we could see this huge body that was sending that strange voice it was a bear a bear that we were trying to save it was dying we tried to help but we couldn’t the weather was awful and it was painful to see that bear in such a situation we were sad but grateful at the same time we found our way back to rest of the team and drank couple of hot tea each.



That was just more than enough in that tremendous place.
  

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Rozy could anyone correct my essay and see if it needs anything more to be good the wind was blowing from east to west we could not see anything beyond two meters. I remember at the moment I regretted the trip I regretted what I wished for more than 6 years to be here in Alaska to join a past of the research team for the wild bear research to achieve something to try experience living in such condition with not enough food ,warm water ,supplies a hard life that might let me appetite some of what I left back home. The wend kept blowing that day with its freeze breeze along the way we were 3 people going on a research mission for our project, we thought for a minute that we were lost however then we kept on walking and walking.

  • Rozy could anyone correct my essay and see if it needs anything more to be good the wind was blowing from east to west we could not see anything beyond two meters.
  • I remember at the moment I regretted the trip I regretted what I wished for more than 6 years to be here in Alaska to join a past of the research team for the wild bear research to achieve something to try experience living in such condition with not enough food ,warm water ,supplies a hard life that might let me appetite some of what I left back home.
  • The wend kept blowing that day with its freeze breeze along the way we were 3 people going on a research mission for our project, we thought for a minute that we were lost however then we kept on walking and walking.
  • We heard a voice from far away we tried to track it down it was a voice unexplainable we were hasted to follow it but we though it might led us to an answer we got near the voice we could see this huge body that was sending that strange voice it was a bear a bear that we were trying to save it was dying we tried to help but we couldn’t the weather was awful and it was painful to see that bear in such a situation we were sad but grateful at the same time we found our way back to rest of the team and drank couple of hot tea each.
  • than enough in that tremendous placeThat was just more .
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Rozy

could anyone correct my essay and see if it needs anything more to be good



the wind was blowing from east to west we could not see anything beyond two meters. I remember at the moment I regretted the trip I regretted what I wished for more than 6 years to be here in Alaska to join a past of the research team for the wild bear research to
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