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Lucus Ong Posted 17 years ago
Grammar
Could any correct this article for me
As I need to improve very much in my English or I won't be able to handle the unified exam in the end of this year.So that I need to write something in English.The exam is in the end of November.
.I injured many times.Although it's a dairy only , I hope there are persons willing to help me to correct this article as correcting composition in an examination and give me some opinions in writing.You hope you are willing to correct my grammar and expression.
Unified examination is coming soon however I still haven't set a stage for anything yet.Besides that, English in the unified examination is very difficult.If I don't have a hell-like training now,I must not be able to get a satisfying result.English is my life ,I must get A1 or better in English.I have only three things which are most important for me ,first perfect English,second yoga and the last xx(a person I fell in love with him).Because of the exercise injuries I can't learn yoga now , xx doesn't love me .So that it means I can only achieve flawless English.So I mustn't fail from obtaining it this time.I absolutely can't let myself become loser once again.
.I injured many times.Although it's a dairy only , I hope there are persons willing to help me to correct this article as correcting composition in an examination and give me some opinions in writing.You hope you are willing to correct my grammar and expression.
Unified examination is coming soon however I still haven't set a stage for anything yet.Besides that, English in the unified examination is very difficult.If I don't have a hell-like training now,I must not be able to get a satisfying result.English is my life ,I must get A1 or better in English.I have only three things which are most important for me ,first perfect English,second yoga and the last xx(a person I fell in love with him).Because of the exercise injuries I can't learn yoga now , xx doesn't love me .So that it means I can only achieve flawless English.So I mustn't fail from obtaining it this time.I absolutely can't let myself become loser once again.
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Hi, The way your composition is written, I will only say that the tone is very “stiff” and the flow is rough. Aslo some adverbial modifiers are awkwardly used, in my opinion. e.
- Hi, The way your composition is written, I will only say that the tone is very “stiff” and the flow is rough.
- Aslo some adverbial modifiers are awkwardly used, in my opinion.
- e.
- “so”, “so that”, “as”, etc….
- So I made a few revisions to take out the rough edges, if you will.
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Hi,
The way your composition is written, I will only say that the tone is very “stiff” and the flow is rough. Aslo some adverbial modifiers are awkwardly used, in my opinion. I.e. “so”, “so that”, “as”, etc…. So I made a few revisions to take out the rough edges, if you will.
As the unified exam approaching at in the end of this year, I need t
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