Cosmetic Surgery

I'm a nurse and I've been studying English for 3 years now. I have to write an essay on a topic related to my career. I've chosen this one about Cosmetic Surgery. I will kindly appreciate any help, especially if you could explain my grammar mistakes and the correct usage of prepositions.

The cosmetic surgery nowadays increases a lot in each country around the world in generally when? And how? These are good questions to answer. Let’s try to find the right reason to explain those questions.



To begin with, I’ll try to answer the question WHEN? Focusing on women I guess when they look themselves at the mirror and see how the time past looks old, fat, and ugly; they start to thinking in something to solve this big inconvenience and HOW? With a plastic surgery, cosmetic surgery, liposuction and all those stuff, to be more skinny and look less old and change some parts of their faces or body that they don’t like.



Another major reason are what the society demand for be a successful woman and e.g. to get a good job in the interview the woman who always win the vacancy are the beautiful and also to get promoted. To add more the publicity are the magazines, TV, and newspaper even on the streets shows women with good bodies, and beautiful faces. ‘s That’s to obligate the ordinary woman to try surgery solutions to be more acceptable.



Opponents of this view say that the surgery is a miracle of the science because help increase their self-esteem and to solve some matters what the nature doesn’t give them with some sessions of surgery and considerable money you would get the body or face of your dreams.



Taking everything into account, I guess cosmetic surgery help some women and hurt others but in generally is an option for people who disagree with their physical aspect, if you have the money and accept the risk is your choice.